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Take me

September 28, 2009
By hannahbee7 DIAMOND, Boca Raton, Florida
hannahbee7 DIAMOND, Boca Raton, Florida
67 articles 1 photo 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You know you’re a writer if your friend tells you a heartbreaking story and your first reaction is – wow, that would make an incredible plot for a novel. You know you’re a smart writer if you manage to keep that reaction to yourself."


Take my life
It's your life too
I gave it up
so I got you

Take my hand
You'll take my heart
don't let it go
I'll come apart

and once my seems
begin to rip
you will forget me
bit-by-bit


The author's comments:
This poem was inspired by a song by elvis. The line says "take my hand, take my whole life too" and the line made this poem come to me. So I guess I should give some credit to Elvis for inspiring me. Thanks Elvis!

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Fia-fia BRONZE said...
on Dec. 14 2011 at 11:20 am
Fia-fia BRONZE, Bethesda, Maryland
4 articles 1 photo 157 comments

this is a wonderful little poem... thank you!

:)


on Aug. 18 2011 at 9:16 am
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
16 articles 0 photos 98 comments
omg so i am a HUGE elvis fan ! i loved it! job well done .

croww said...
on Feb. 26 2011 at 2:14 pm
loved it!!

on Jul. 8 2010 at 8:34 pm
ShenelleCrystal SILVER, M, New York
7 articles 0 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Laugh your heart out dance in the rain cherish the memories ignore the pain love + learn forget and forgive because remember you only have [one life to live] ♥

This is so good :) I love it , shows a very good talent . please check out my work :)

on Oct. 27 2009 at 5:30 pm
hannahbee7 DIAMOND, Boca Raton, Florida
67 articles 1 photo 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You know you’re a writer if your friend tells you a heartbreaking story and your first reaction is – wow, that would make an incredible plot for a novel. You know you’re a smart writer if you manage to keep that reaction to yourself."

Thanks i'll defiantly check out you're work too:]

on Oct. 15 2009 at 11:57 am
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

this is great! although its short i think it has such deep and sweet meaning :) the rhythm is great and i love all the content in the piece :) i all around love it. check out some of my work if you could, i would love your opinion. 5 stars ;)

on Oct. 14 2009 at 10:25 pm
Lixxy_93 DIAMOND, Westminster, California
53 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have them, flaunt them" -Circle of Friends

"may the saddest day of the future be no worse then the happiest day of your past" -irish blessing

If male homosexuals are called "gay," then female homosexuals should be called "ecstatic."

amazing! i love this :]

on Oct. 8 2009 at 12:35 pm
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

i like it lol but i like elvis too ;)

Kaitt PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 8 2009 at 12:07 pm
Kaitt PLATINUM, Petersburg, Virginia
30 articles 1 photo 8 comments
Good poem, just one thing, it should be seams, not seems


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