The Thirst

September 5, 2009
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The bright sun shone down on the flowers that day.
It made them sweat like slaves in a field of weeds.
To the flowers the sun felt like a giant pool of lava sitting by the bay.
Every inch and piece of Mother Nature wished their owner would come out and do good deeds.

Finally the owner came out with an old pail.
The garden drank up half the world’s water in one sip.
There was not anything left, even for a lovely little snail.
The snail looked at the daisy with dismay and gave it one big nip.

The garden reminds the bird of a glimmering pool of life.
The turtle thinks of it as a place to rest.
The hunter thinks of it as a place to leave a knife.
Last but not least the chicks think it’s their nest!

A garden is full of adventure with flowers as your friends.
Think of them standing right beside you, helping you and holding your hand.
Take your first step and you will see your fun may never end.
Just a tip, you’ll know where a garden is, when you hear a glorious band.

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TheComet said...
Jul. 31, 2014 at 12:26 pm
Actually I think it was beautiful! The sentences were kinda long that it seems like a long text and not a poem But the meaning was so deep emotional and poetic. It's awesome and I loved it. I know this must be an old poem i.e submitted few years ago. but I hope it's not too late that you can see my comment and know what I think ^_^ I hope you're still writing though cuz you're really amazing and you have the skill to be so poetic and use such beautiful words. thanks for sharing t... (more »)
jetta.ckThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 24, 2013 at 3:13 pm
I liked it! Some of the rhymes seemed a bit forced, but it was great otherwise. Also, make sure you've got an actual rhythm in the poem, or else it just sounds almost like a run-on sentence. Or it doesn't sound like a poem at all! Just keep practicing (:
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