After Wounded Knee MAG

March 1, 2009
By Elise Lockwood BRONZE, Carmel, Indiana
Elise Lockwood BRONZE, Carmel, Indiana
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You still wear that old war paint
(angry lines slashed above your eyes)
I can feel you waiting for the battle to come
(spikes of red staining your cheeks)
There are no pawing horses now
No painted hands on their haunches
(the number of warrior souls you stole)
No noonday sun beating on bare backs
No smell of sweat and leather and bravery
Puncturing the familiar woodsmoke
(breastplates of porcupine quills, feathers in hair)
No ululations of war, yelling at fear
No singing, no dancing, no tribes, no homes
(scars left from the struggle free from the sun)
Just a drum drum drum beat
(a piece of flesh left for the Great Spirit)
Piercing through dreams.


The author's comments:
This was inspired by the Battle at Wounded Knee in 1890, a massacre of the Sioux.

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on Oct. 21 2009 at 5:48 pm
NaTivE_BeAutiE GOLD, Ann Arbor, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
~a woman looked at me and said, "You know, you really don't look Indian."So I smiled at her and responded: "Well you don't look stupid, but appearances can be awfully deceiving."~

thank you for highlighting the ongoing struggle for those of the first nations. Your writing is strong and this poem was very meaningful to my Lakota roots. Once again thank you and keep it up, my friend.

on Oct. 21 2009 at 9:35 am
dragonfan SILVER, Arcidia, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Death truly makes an artist"

this is great. It is an amazing poem. Keep it up!

on Sep. 30 2009 at 9:06 pm
Oh! That's good to know. Thank you for informing me.

Elockwood said...
on Sep. 30 2009 at 10:15 am
It is in italics in the actual copy of the poem, but Teen Ink does not let you submit things in italics. Because of that, I had to differentiate the lines in some way, and parentheses were the only way I could think of.

on Sep. 29 2009 at 7:33 pm
I also agree. Perhaps you can italicize those lines instead of using the parentheses? It won't look the same but it has about the same meaning.

on Sep. 29 2009 at 12:29 pm
ainticute BRONZE, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Oh i was wondering why you used puncuatinon towards the end of the pome and not in the begining i think you either use puncuation througout or just not use it at all

Black Heart said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 10:27 am
I agree. I write about war sometimes. I even dream about it. Most of the time I'll take that dream and write about it. I makes it more realalistic. You're a poet so keep it up!!!=)

on Sep. 1 2009 at 2:53 am
EmilytheAuthor DIAMOND, St. Francisville, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
Be who you are and say what you feel because those that mind don't matter, and those that matter don't mind. -dr. seuss

glad to see i'm not the only one moved enough by that massacre to write about it. keep it up!

on Jun. 29 2009 at 6:19 pm
relenanite BRONZE, Bailey, Mississippi
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This poem Is really amazing. It actually puts you there in that place, as if your standing staring into the warriors face-grave, sad, feirce, and proud. It makes history mean something again. But I also agree that the parenthesis are distracting, and also, even though I love the line "the number of warrior souls you stole" and think it definately has an important place in the poem, it's a little off balance wear you put it, almost like changing your character refernce of the warrior, and thus the entire poem. That's just what I got from it.it's like it's mssing something to make it fit in understandablt. Overall an amazing poem!!! I'd love to read more of your work!!!

Quita BRONZE said...
on Jun. 21 2009 at 10:31 pm
Quita BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
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this is good

RiaRen SILVER said...
on Jun. 9 2009 at 1:24 am
RiaRen SILVER, New Bothwell, Other
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hey this is really good. i get the meaning, but i think i have to agree with "CressFerria" the parenthisis do take the attention away from the rest of your poem. i still like your poem. it has a certain... spark :)

on Jun. 4 2009 at 1:55 am
Wow!! you're a great writer,this is deep.. never stop beleiving in yourself your dreams WILL take you far. Good job

amyxu said...
on May. 22 2009 at 6:30 pm
I was just browsing Teen Ink website and I came across your poem. Good work! The imagery is all there and the cultural aspects of the poem are piercingly worded!

on May. 14 2009 at 11:50 pm
RheaD.Ravenfinger BRONZE, Juneau, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
1 Corinthians 13:4-8

OH MY GOODNESS!!! I love this poem! I do! I do! Craziness! Oh goodness! I love it. FIVE STARS!!!!!!!!!! Oh my goodness! This is SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO good. I could go on and on . . . . !!! YEA!!! You're an awesome writer!

on May. 9 2009 at 10:15 pm
Courtney.Firestone BRONZE, Thornhill, Ontario, Other
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I don't think I completely understood this... But I really like it anyways!

Jaquie BRONZE said...
on May. 5 2009 at 12:20 am
Jaquie BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
This is certainly one of my favorites: "I will become even more undignified than this, and I will be humiliated in my own eyes." -2 Samuel 6:22

Deep.

Good bless,

...,

DoLL_F@C3 said...
on May. 3 2009 at 11:01 pm
DoLL_F@C3, Memphis, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"FORGIVING YESTERDAY, LIVING FOR TODAY, NOT WORRIED BOUT TOMORROW." Doll

this is good

Firefly said...
on May. 3 2009 at 9:35 pm
This is an amazing poem

Sarah-Lou said...
on May. 1 2009 at 12:32 am
I'm a poet from Indiana too! Keep writing.

on Apr. 30 2009 at 3:52 pm
Greek311 PLATINUM, New City, New York
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Simply Beautiful




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