After Wounded Knee MAG

March 1, 2009
By Elise Lockwood BRONZE, Carmel, Indiana
Elise Lockwood BRONZE, Carmel, Indiana
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You still wear that old war paint
(angry lines slashed above your eyes)
I can feel you waiting for the battle to come
(spikes of red staining your cheeks)
There are no pawing horses now
No painted hands on their haunches
(the number of warrior souls you stole)
No noonday sun beating on bare backs
No smell of sweat and leather and bravery
Puncturing the familiar woodsmoke
(breastplates of porcupine quills, feathers in hair)
No ululations of war, yelling at fear
No singing, no dancing, no tribes, no homes
(scars left from the struggle free from the sun)
Just a drum drum drum beat
(a piece of flesh left for the Great Spirit)
Piercing through dreams.


The author's comments:
This was inspired by the Battle at Wounded Knee in 1890, a massacre of the Sioux.

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BMMSKC said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 9:25 am
I could see everything you were talking about....love it

bmmsgk said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 8:37 am
i like how you said war paint was refering to blood in your poem

on Feb. 8 2010 at 8:27 pm
Audrea15 PLATINUM, Murphysboro, Illinois
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Everybody wants happiness. Nobody wants pain. But you cant have a rainbow. Without a little rain.

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on Feb. 8 2010 at 6:49 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

Really unique. I loved it.

on Feb. 8 2010 at 6:30 pm
divinelove33 GOLD, Ballwin, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Our fingerprints never fade from the lives that we touch

fantastic. it left me awe struck. great job

notw said...
on Feb. 8 2010 at 12:55 pm
that was reall deep that was awesome

on Jan. 17 2010 at 7:44 pm
LuLu95 PLATINUM, Denver, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"Oooh! Dark matter, we better bring a flashlight!"

this is a GREAT poem i loved how you use parentheses

on Jan. 17 2010 at 3:51 pm
FrySnickerdoodle, Red Lion, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Pain is weakness leaving the body"
"He who angers you, conquers you"

This poem is so gorgeous. The use of colorful language is incredible.

on Jan. 17 2010 at 12:38 am
dancingdaisies GOLD, Westborough, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
" you can't get what you want until you know what you want"-Joe Jackson
"Dancing is like dreaming with your feet!"-Contanze
"Why are you talking about all of these thing you're getting & nothing about what you already have?"~MMEE!!:)

tHERE IS A GREAT USE OF LANGUAGE, BUT I DON'T GET IT

on Dec. 26 2009 at 9:47 pm
scarletP SILVER, East Lansing, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"A smart girl listens but doesn't believe, kisses but doesn't love and leaves before she is left."
-- Marilyn Monroe

see, if they read this to us in class i think i would have wanted to learn more about this battle. wonderful.

on Dec. 4 2009 at 8:17 pm
AWScienceGeek GOLD, Los Gatos, California
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That was beautiful. Absolutely gorgeous!

Book Addict said...
on Dec. 4 2009 at 5:15 pm
I love this, you put it together in an amazing way. Painting a picture of a moment in american history that most would rather leave behind being the horrible nature of the event, but you wrote about it. It's amazing!(:

Elockwood said...
on Nov. 17 2009 at 7:08 am
Since this is a poem, whatever the poet wants is generally grammatically correct. Take E.E. Cummings, for example. His punctuation is definitely not grammatically correct, but it adds a lot of depth to the poem. In this, the parentheses are used to set apart certain lines.

on Nov. 12 2009 at 7:13 pm
sasssgirrrl22 PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Giving up is not a part of my vocabulary."
"Don't let the fear of striking out keep you from playing the game."
"Truth be told I miss ya, truth be told I'm lying."

this is amazing. u set this horrible time into a great perspective. awesome descriptionz. keep writing!! ;P

on Nov. 12 2009 at 5:38 pm
despurlock DIAMOND, Morgantown, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The heart has its reasons which reason does not know." -Pascal, Pensees, 1670

This poem was absolutely gorgeous! I love how you took an event and molded its meaning into your peace of flowing awesome-ness (for lack of better words) :) Great job!

on Nov. 12 2009 at 4:25 pm
AspiringJellyfish BRONZE, Holmdel, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Normality is Overrated"

I don't understand the use of parenthesis? Is that grammatically correct?

on Nov. 12 2009 at 2:15 pm
This was a really great poem i am really bored at school and there for had nothing to do. It really helped me get out o my bordom!

jmc.13 said...
on Nov. 12 2009 at 10:04 am
jmc.13, Dobbs Ferry, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather regret what I did than what I didn't do."

Really beautiful phrasing. I loved your word choice and use of parenthesis, it added a lot of depth.

Great work!

on Nov. 12 2009 at 9:28 am
cheerchick4 SILVER, Beaumont, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
All is fair in love and war

it is an amaizing poem

on Nov. 12 2009 at 3:43 am
tomtamtimmy GOLD, Sydney, Other
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Favorite Quote:
you don't know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have

you have loads of talent. good work


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