Winter Happiness This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

December 13, 2008
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sitting on my rooftop
in the cold winter air
with my sister
side by side
counting every star
and wishing on the ones
we think are the brightest
until we get so tired
we can barely keep our eyes open.

so we climb down
helping each other along the way
as we trip on the ends
of our baggy sleepy pants
lead each other through
the darkness of the house
skipping over the loose floorboards
trying not to wake mom.

climb underneath the
blankets of our squeaky bed
and listen to her voice
as she tells me everything about her day
until i’m way too tired to reply
and fall asleep ….

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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Zithia This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 7, 2012 at 8:15 pm
I am very critical of poems, maybe a little too critical, but I love this.  The tone, diction and syntax is perfect.  There is a dreamy quality about this poem that is very appropriate.  The flow is great too. 
lilliemais said...
Sept. 15, 2012 at 7:09 pm
Good job. I have a little sister - and this is the exact feeling I have in nights like those. I completely adored this poem, great work.
ImagineLots said...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 2:31 pm
I love this. It is simple and happiness comes with simple things.
Fia-fia said...
Jan. 17, 2012 at 6:52 pm
This is really sweet, and true happiness. Happiness comes from the little things, and it is so sweet to see the wonderful connection between the characters. Thank you :)
MoraleAsh said...
Dec. 26, 2011 at 6:43 pm
I really enjoy the simplicity. Great job!
Cbsiegel said...
Dec. 9, 2011 at 1:35 am

I can literally see it happening in my head...

Great Job!

Dreammer said...
Nov. 12, 2011 at 11:39 am
Enjoyable piece I enjoyed it:)
Gingersnap777 said...
Oct. 21, 2011 at 10:20 am
A very touching reminds me of those times when my sister and I aren't fighting.  It's times like those when we're the best of friends.
Aderes18 said...
Jul. 3, 2011 at 1:40 pm
I really like this poem!! It's very exquisite! This poem reminds me of really good winter nights that me and my sister have enjoyed!! :) 
Jul. 3, 2011 at 11:14 am
Lucky you, this is pretty deep and kind of sweet to an extent always imagined something like this never thought it existed, lucky you once again 
Loverboy12 said...
Jun. 30, 2011 at 12:23 am
I love this poem from the begining becuase snow is my fav season but i also wish me and my sisters were that close
J.P. said...
May 20, 2011 at 12:23 pm
You know, I wish me and my sister could get along as well as you two.
J.P. replied...
May 20, 2011 at 12:39 pm
T_T I want to cry everytime I read this.
kvater said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:05 pm
i really enjoyed this poem its something alot of people could relate to and i like the imagery.
lala15 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 3:44 pm
dfefinitely. i want to say everything you did :))
decievinghimesama said...
Feb. 21, 2011 at 11:48 pm
I love this piece♥
above said...
Oct. 12, 2010 at 6:50 pm
i really like this piece of writing. its reminds me soo much of me and my older sister. thank you! now i can share another thing with her...
alanacarlene said...
Jun. 24, 2010 at 4:02 pm
This is really pretty and I can see it in my mind. I have a question: roughly how long after you submitted this did it take for teenink to approve it and post it online???
Kadamade said...
May 14, 2010 at 9:10 am
I love this. My sister and I have a great bond like this poem illustrates. It's great! You did a wonderful job, and keep up the good work!
roxannemaria29 replied...
Jun. 8, 2010 at 10:58 am
i like this alot, can really relate and reminise.
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