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A Play On A Play On Words This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.

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Tgentry15 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 8, 2011 at 6:15 pm:
i love this! it's the type of creativity i wish i had. it's completely amazing
 
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ArcaneGhost said...
Apr. 7, 2011 at 10:43 pm:

It's another work of art that reaches past my general animosity towards poetry.

It's great!

 
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save.me.4.once said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 8:22 am:

......wow. You are truly gifted and have an amazing poetic voice. Dont stop writing. Writing is like a portal into another world when your life lets you down. We would get along.

                        -Gena

 
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FaerieDust said...
Apr. 5, 2011 at 11:27 pm:
This is absolutely amazing. The title made me laugh; it makes perfect sense, even though the goal is for it to not make any sense at all. Keep writing; you have talen. (:
 
save.me.4.once replied...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 8:22 am :
talent. Understatement.
 
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SeerKnowsBest said...
Apr. 5, 2011 at 7:37 pm:
beautiful andrewsaur.
 
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New.York.Dreamer said...
Apr. 5, 2011 at 4:43 pm:
i <3 this it;s incredddible.
 
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hopelovepain said...
Mar. 30, 2011 at 5:11 pm:

"the pitter patter of my soul /
across the aluminum roof of my mind"

Wow. Just wow.

 
ArcaneGhost replied...
Apr. 7, 2011 at 10:41 pm :
I liked that part too. :)
 
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Riley said...
Mar. 14, 2011 at 10:08 pm:
Dude, it doesn't rhyme. That's awesome!!! I hate it when poems rhyme, it's so constricting.
 
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LiveInTheMoment said...
Mar. 14, 2011 at 4:43 pm:
Wow, this poem really made me sit back and evaluate my life. I loved how creative it was, and how well the words flowed. It definitely had strong emotion behind it. Loved it, and keep on writing! I want to hear more from you.
 
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oceanpara said...
Mar. 14, 2011 at 10:12 am:
i love how it is free and awesome i love great job.
 
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giggels3000 said...
Mar. 14, 2011 at 10:11 am:
I love how the poem was free flowing and light but it made sense!!! great!
 
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WillowFalls This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 20, 2011 at 4:33 pm:

*Tag as favorite* :)

LOVE THIS!

 
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PolygotCat said...
Feb. 20, 2011 at 2:57 pm:
Wow, I love freeverse poetry -- forming meter and rhyme and scrcture with your own inuition. I think this poem is very beautiful. It's very ee cummings. It's very easy to understand.
 
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iamAbel said...
Feb. 20, 2011 at 8:16 am:
This is so amazing! Going under my favorites. :)
 
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Mgymnast This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 23, 2011 at 2:11 pm:
This is really good! I love the title!!! you have a real talent for poetry! Also, If you get the chance could you check out some of my poems such as A Mirror Image & The Sinners Confession (and comment and rate them??) It would be greatly appreciated! THANKS!! :):)
 
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Jessie-Mo said...
Jan. 7, 2011 at 10:41 pm:
This is a great poem. I read it over and over, and it was great. You obviously have a great talent. I suggest you continue writing, and I hope to see more from you.
 
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Kiyoko This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 7, 2011 at 9:49 pm:
I really like this poem. I've read it twice now, and it was just as good the second time- which cannot be said about all poems. Keep writing! 
 
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Lizzy_BarnettThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 7, 2011 at 6:11 pm:
I love the first half to death! "with a head upon my hat/ and feet upon my shoes" made me want to die of awesomeness.
 
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