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November 13, 2008
By Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark


When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.



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on Apr. 8 2011 at 6:15 pm
Tgentry15 SILVER, Moses Lake, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
Celebrate your successes and stand strong when adversity hits. For when storm clouds roll in, eagles will soar while small birds take cover. BE AN EAGLE

i love this! it's the type of creativity i wish i had. it's completely amazing

ArcaneGhost said...
on Apr. 7 2011 at 10:43 pm
ArcaneGhost, Hendersonville, Tennessee
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It's another work of art that reaches past my general animosity towards poetry.

It's great!


ArcaneGhost said...
on Apr. 7 2011 at 10:41 pm
ArcaneGhost, Hendersonville, Tennessee
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I liked that part too. :)

on Apr. 6 2011 at 8:22 am
save.me.4.once SILVER, Vero Beach, Florida
5 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Paper is more patient than man.

talent. Understatement.

on Apr. 6 2011 at 8:22 am
save.me.4.once SILVER, Vero Beach, Florida
5 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Paper is more patient than man.

......wow. You are truly gifted and have an amazing poetic voice. Dont stop writing. Writing is like a portal into another world when your life lets you down. We would get along.

                        -Gena


on Apr. 5 2011 at 11:27 pm
FaerieDust BRONZE, Olympia, Washington
4 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
There is something about the outside of a horse that is good for the inside of a man. ~Winston Churchill


Horse sense is the thing a horse has which keeps it from betting on people. ~W.C. Fields

This is absolutely amazing. The title made me laugh; it makes perfect sense, even though the goal is for it to not make any sense at all. Keep writing; you have talen. (:

on Apr. 5 2011 at 7:37 pm
SeerKnowsBest SILVER, Pryor, Oklahoma
5 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
i have so many favourite quotes, but one that has stuck with me for years is " to die would be an awfully big adventure" -peter pan, Peter Pan, j. m. barrie

beautiful andrewsaur.

on Apr. 5 2011 at 4:43 pm
New.York.Dreamer SILVER, Lapeer, Michigan
8 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When the road of life gets rough and potholes come abroad, your courage and strength come alive. The giving up may seem the only hope, it never is. The road ahead never stops. You make the choice, never anybody else."


You

i <3 this it;s incredddible.

hopelovepain said...
on Mar. 30 2011 at 5:11 pm
hopelovepain, Maplewood, New Jersey
0 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
The ones who say they love us are the ones that hurt us the most.

"the pitter patter of my soul /
across the aluminum roof of my mind"

Wow. Just wow.


Riley said...
on Mar. 14 2011 at 10:08 pm
Dude, it doesn't rhyme. That's awesome!!! I hate it when poems rhyme, it's so constricting.

on Mar. 14 2011 at 4:43 pm
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 275 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

Wow, this poem really made me sit back and evaluate my life. I loved how creative it was, and how well the words flowed. It definitely had strong emotion behind it. Loved it, and keep on writing! I want to hear more from you.

oceanpara said...
on Mar. 14 2011 at 10:12 am
i love how it is free and awesome i love great job.

giggels3000 said...
on Mar. 14 2011 at 10:11 am
I love how the poem was free flowing and light but it made sense!!! great!

on Feb. 20 2011 at 4:33 pm
CassidyMarturana BRONZE, Califon, New Jersey
1 article 4 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life isn't about just waiting out the storm. It's about learning to dance in the rain."

*Tag as favorite* :)

LOVE THIS!


PolygotCat said...
on Feb. 20 2011 at 2:57 pm
PolygotCat, Quincy, Massachusetts
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
I cannot see what flowers are at my feet,
Nor what soft incense hangs upon the boughs,
But, in embalmed darkness, guess each sweet
Wherewith the seasonable month endows
The grass, the thicket, and the fruit-tree wild;
White hawthorn, and the pastoral eglantine;

Fast fading violets cover'd up in leaves;



And mid-May's eldest child,
The coming musk-rose, full of dewy wine,

The murmurous haunt of flies on summer eves.
---John Keat's "Ode to a Nightingale"

Wow, I love freeverse poetry -- forming meter and rhyme and scrcture with your own inuition. I think this poem is very beautiful. It's very ee cummings. It's very easy to understand.

on Feb. 20 2011 at 8:16 am
carilloony GOLD, Sterling, Virginia
12 articles 2 photos 94 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To love another person is to see the face of God."

This is so amazing! Going under my favorites. :)

on Jan. 23 2011 at 2:11 pm
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND, Parker, Colorado
57 articles 25 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you don't leap you'lll never know what it's like to fly"

This is really good! I love the title!!! you have a real talent for poetry! Also, If you get the chance could you check out some of my poems such as A Mirror Image & The Sinners Confession (and comment and rate them??) It would be greatly appreciated! THANKS!! :):)

on Jan. 7 2011 at 10:41 pm
Jessie-Mo SILVER, Mo. City, Texas
6 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Mama always said life was like a box of chocolates. You never know what you're gonna get."

This is a great poem. I read it over and over, and it was great. You obviously have a great talent. I suggest you continue writing, and I hope to see more from you.

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on Jan. 7 2011 at 9:49 pm
Kiyoko GOLD, Knoxville, Tennessee
10 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
Independence is my happiness, I view things as they are without regard to place or person. My country is the world, and my religion is to do good. - Thomas Paine

I really like this poem. I've read it twice now, and it was just as good the second time- which cannot be said about all poems. Keep writing! 

on Jan. 7 2011 at 6:11 pm
Elizabeth_Day SILVER, Battle Ground, Washington
9 articles 0 photos 34 comments
I love the first half to death! "with a head upon my hat/ and feet upon my shoes" made me want to die of awesomeness.




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