A Play On A Play On Words MAG

November 13, 2008
By Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark


When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.



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Sky.. BRONZE said...
on May. 19 2011 at 11:38 pm
Sky.. BRONZE, Manteca, California
3 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
But paradise is locked and bolted…
[So] we must take a journey around the world to see if a back door has perhaps been left open.
-Heinrich von Kleist, “On the Puppet Theater”

“Money talks and a lot of money sings and dances.” -Vane Kattalak

I don't understand it.

Zekerom999 said...
on May. 19 2011 at 9:21 pm
SWEET MOTHER OF... THIS IS AWSOME!!!

on May. 19 2011 at 7:53 pm
young-and-confused SILVER, Bayville, New York
9 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"we're not here for a long time; we're here for a good time."
"You must first love yourself."
"Keep on keepin' on."

this poem is beautiful. i absolutely love it.

on May. 19 2011 at 7:04 pm
TolkienLewisWhitman BRONZE, Millersburg, Ohio
2 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All of my posessions for a moment of time." ~ Queen Elizabeth I

Wonderful! You did do a great job using figurative language, and touching our deepest feelings.

J.P. said...
on May. 19 2011 at 12:28 pm

I love the whole thing... it sounds relly deep(:

 


on Apr. 29 2011 at 2:39 pm
carstorm SILVER, Harrisonburg, Virginia
6 articles 2 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"One who has done nothing can not criticize one who has done little"

I was going to try and decribe this poem but there is no words to describe it.

on Apr. 27 2011 at 9:03 pm
little-miss-mistakes GOLD, Plano, Texas
18 articles 2 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
even after all these years the sun has never said to the earth, you owe me... look at what a love like that can do, it can light up the sky

amazing amazing completely amazing... but if you read all these other comments you already knew that!!!! seriously, greatness.... my one negative comment would be that the picture looks to much like justin beiber  *shudder*, but seriously great

bken24 said...
on Apr. 27 2011 at 8:25 pm
I'd like to shake your hand and say "Well done."

evergreen232 said...
on Apr. 27 2011 at 7:14 pm
evergreen232, Portland, Oregon
0 articles 3 photos 21 comments
wow! great job! i love the last 4 lines :)(: very thoughtful!

on Apr. 27 2011 at 6:30 pm
happyboat SILVER, Tacoma, Washington
6 articles 9 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Risks, I like to say, always pay off. You learn what to do, and what not to do." -Jonas Salk

Wow. This was great. "A head upon my hat"? I think yes.

Hope_ BRONZE said...
on Apr. 27 2011 at 4:52 pm
Hope_ BRONZE, San Antonio, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
Does my sexiness upset you -Maya Angelou

Its Awesomee:D
I Love It!'(:

on Apr. 27 2011 at 3:52 pm
Cerberus SILVER, Middletown, Ohio
8 articles 3 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be a leader, not a follower."

plainly and bluntly put...LOVE IT!!

on Apr. 27 2011 at 3:46 pm
Kelsey_O SILVER, Essex Fells, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It is our choices that show what we truly are, far more than our abilities," JK Rowling, Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets

This is amazing! I love the line "except the pitter patter of my soul/ across the aluminum roof of my mind". It's brilliant. The imagery and the languange in this is just so cool. Amazing work! Check out my article? 

on Apr. 27 2011 at 3:17 pm
WindDancer GOLD, Lexington, Kentucky
10 articles 3 photos 77 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's time to start living the life you've imagined"
- Henry James

"I read to escape, I write to confront."

This is stunning. It's so thoughtful, and the imagery is just amazing. It connects and flows, and it doesn't ramble like I tend to do when I write poetry. It's like a puzzle- really, really good work. Keep writing and dreaming!

on Apr. 27 2011 at 3:13 pm
Kelly Milicia BRONZE, Fairfield, Connecticut
2 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Great work

That is the best poem I have ever read and I love the title and the amazing poetic techniques you use to bring the poem to life!! 


on Apr. 27 2011 at 10:50 am
my.freedom.lies.in.free.verse PLATINUM, Tosa, Wisconsin
24 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm in love with you, and I know that love is just a shout into a void, and that oblivion is inevitable... and I know the sun will swallow the only earth we'll ever have, and I am in love with you." Augustus Waters

srry i didnt mean to reply, i thought it wuz a new comment! oops

on Apr. 27 2011 at 10:49 am
my.freedom.lies.in.free.verse PLATINUM, Tosa, Wisconsin
24 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm in love with you, and I know that love is just a shout into a void, and that oblivion is inevitable... and I know the sun will swallow the only earth we'll ever have, and I am in love with you." Augustus Waters

this has the most metaphors stuffed into the fewest lines ive ever seen! i wish i could write like you do!

on Apr. 27 2011 at 10:34 am
This is soooooooo good and amazing. LOVE it!!!!

on Apr. 27 2011 at 7:53 am
thegirlwiththebrokenheart BRONZE, Holt, Michigan
2 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
It's not the years in a life it's the life in the years <3 Abe Lincoln

This is amazingly good! I love the way your word choices collide! You should take a look at mine! thanks jenna.

on Apr. 22 2011 at 8:57 pm
IDKXmere13 SILVER, Old Forge, Pennsylvania
8 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
dream like you'll live forever live like you are going to die today!

This is amazing! It really makes me think. This is an amazing piece! :D


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