Cotton Candy MAG

October 25, 2008
By freedomfighter97 BRONZE, Lake Ann, Michigan
freedomfighter97 BRONZE, Lake Ann, Michigan
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puffs of sweet fiberglass
dissolve into pink crystals
on the pinnacle of my tongue.

they fall like tickled icicles
puncturing the walls
of my abdomen.

still I consume
the addicting substance,
permitting my body
to slowly commit suicide.



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on Apr. 20 2011 at 12:43 pm
volleyball17 PLATINUM, Grimes, Iowa
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:) heyyyyyyy whats up haha i am hyper i a just ate ten pixy sticks ;)

on Apr. 20 2011 at 12:17 pm
JamesBLaurie SILVER, Montreal, Other
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sorry, not supposed to be a reply! :)

on Apr. 20 2011 at 12:17 pm
JamesBLaurie SILVER, Montreal, Other
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Either write something worth reading or do something worth writing - Benjamin Franklin

GREAT!!! It really leaves you thinking. When you first said fiberglass I thought 'What?!?!' and then I thought 'no, it must be another way of discribing cotton candy' and then I thought 'wait, it is fiberglass'...it is fiberglass, right?

on Apr. 6 2011 at 8:12 pm
marissa87 BRONZE, Glenmoore, Pennsylvania
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wowoowowowowowowoow why  can i not right like these peopl you are sooo maazing..... the way u wrote tht was unbelieveable srry for my typing fails btw

 


jmurph said...
on Apr. 6 2011 at 11:57 am
jmurph, Saugus, Massachusetts
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That was awesome! Made me taste the cotton candy in my mouth and feel iton my tounge, nice job!

scoobydew said...
on Mar. 29 2011 at 10:25 pm
Nice analogy

EMOcupcake said...
on Mar. 29 2011 at 7:53 pm
EMOcupcake, Toronto, Other
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"I have not failed. I've just found 10,000 ways that won't work." --Thomas Edison.

Wow, this is amazing. O: I love the metaphor here. I don't think I'll ever look at cotton candy the same way. xD

on Mar. 29 2011 at 7:50 pm
jeepster72 BRONZE, Perris, California
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lol the person didn actually mention cotton candy in the poem just in the title that doesn make it about cotton candy, it's just a distractor. And great job!;-)

on Mar. 29 2011 at 5:58 pm
inspiredbytheworld BRONZE, Rockford, Michigan
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This is a truly beautiful piece. It's like cotton candy...in an entirely different view. Nice job!

quiet1 said...
on Mar. 29 2011 at 1:49 pm
quiet1, Fort Mill, South Carolina
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Love will always find its way in.
If you don't like me at my worst, you don't deserve me at my best.
You drive, you text, you die.

you crazy?

on Mar. 29 2011 at 10:04 am
lonleywriter SILVER, Coram, New York
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Lol, such a good treat, yet so addicting and deadly

on Mar. 28 2011 at 1:46 pm
gabzter12 BRONZE, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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haha i would have never guessed that this was about cotton candy if i didnt read the title!
good work!

on Mar. 7 2011 at 8:22 pm
Kimmy_Kerosene BRONZE, Ormond Beach, Florida
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OMG! I love this! Its great!(:

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on Mar. 7 2011 at 11:00 am
Bka341997 GOLD, Bigfork, Montana
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Nice view on cotten candy:) its almos like she/he (?) is talking aout a drug of some sort. He/She likes it but its killen 'em. Idk. Good Job :)

on Feb. 25 2011 at 8:59 am
ImBetterThanYou, Marshalltown, Iowa
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mmmm cotton candy

on Feb. 13 2011 at 7:58 pm
AthenaBook SILVER, Arlington, Virginia
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Very interesting take on cotton candy; I really enjoyed this! Very graphic.... Well Done!

on Feb. 13 2011 at 7:38 pm
Crazymexican GOLD, Jay, Maine
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love this it is very intresting on your veiw of cotton candy which i now have a want to have

on Feb. 13 2011 at 5:19 pm
IsobelFree DIAMOND, Hamilton, Other
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"As long as there is open road, the familiar has the most formidable competitor." - Anonymous

Ummm...she DID send it to teen ink and she DID get it published on the website.....?

great poem, by the way. love the language and imagery.


on Feb. 13 2011 at 11:30 am
The_Delusional_Philosopher BRONZE, Burbank, California
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"I am a God, for I can create anything from the manifestation of my thoughts"
"Because it's there"

Well, thank you for that. Now excuse me for I must puke out the cotton candy I just indulged myself in.

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on Jan. 29 2011 at 6:49 pm
gleek1234 GOLD, Burlington, Vermont
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wow...


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