Fallen Wings

May 31, 2013
By Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green


Dark wings spread afar,
The rush of power surges within.
Nothing quenches this beating heart;
Its pouring veins
Flood with sin.

Bow your head
To its light;
The Angel of Darkness
Is chained to night.

Lovely features
Conceal fire inside
Wild temper
Waits in pride.

Lightning flashes with pure fury;
The beast attacks,
With a clap of thunder.

Bow your head
To its light;
Beware the
Angel of Darkness,
Chained to night.

He descends from above
Attentive to revenge.
Moonlit wings flap with hate,
Eyes aglow with false love.

Heed to the angel that silently cries,
Rejected by the storm;
The weeping creature
Tries to fly,
But shatters with surpassing mourn.

Bow your head
To its light,
The Angel of Darkness
Forever chained
To night.

Restrain your claim
To the true power;
The angel grows weak
With passing hours.

Refrain from the cup
Of temptation,
Yield to the thought
Of His creation.

Bow your head
To his faux light,
The Angel of Darkness
Continues to fight.

Rain cascades off his back
Like the tears that do not hide.
Lo to the angel who
Can’t return,
Acast to the other side.

Bow your head,
To his lost might;
The Angel of Darkness
Will never be bright.


The author's comments:
I'm not really sure what brought on this idea... In class, my friends wanted to have a poetry contest and the topic was "angel." So, this was the product, and of course, it has a double meaning. Hope you like it!

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Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Jun. 19 2013 at 10:09 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

Hahahahaha you don't know how hard your comment made me laugh. It made my day! Thank you a million times!!

on Jun. 19 2013 at 4:35 pm
ZeroDarkFlirty BRONZE, Eastvale, California
3 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The strength of the pack is the wolf
And the strength of the wolf is the pack."
-Rudyard Kipling

Wow. This was...well, I don't really have words that can aptly describe the amount of awesome contained in this, so let me just say...5/5 stars. Now, if you'll excuse me, I have to go to the ER. I'm allergic to large amounts of epicness. :)

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Jun. 17 2013 at 8:16 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

Thank u soooo much for the constructive criticism! I hope to utilize it ASAP... I definetly agree on ur opinion on my title. Thanks again! :)

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Jun. 17 2013 at 8:15 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

Thank u soo much!!!! :)

on Jun. 10 2013 at 6:21 pm
juliacoccaro SILVER, Spanish Fort, Alabama
5 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'd sell you to Satan for one corn chip."

I wasn't sure what to expect, considering this came from the "opinion" section of the chat room (at a first glance, I was almost certain it was just spam). But I was pleasantly surprised, to say the least. Your vocabulary is very broad and you don't over-exaggerate the descriptive elements of the poem. The creativity in this poem is spectacular. In all honesty, the title of the poem is cliché and something I have seen used far too many times. While the poem itself is quite the opposite, I think you should use the originality aspect in the body in your title as well. Otherwise, I see no mistakes and I am impressed. Great job!

SongBird04 said...
on Jun. 10 2013 at 2:07 pm
SongBird04, Littleton, Colorado
0 articles 0 photos 89 comments

Favorite Quote:
You've gotta take the good with the bad, smile when you're sad, love what you got and remember what you had. Always forgive but never forget, learn from your mistakes but never regret. People change and things go wrong but always remember life goes on

Hi Hanban! I don't know how this doesn't have more comments! It's truly amazing! It's very deep and I like the style it's written in. This poem is very true and even a bit mysterious! It's unique and I love it! Keep it up! :) 

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Jun. 10 2013 at 11:52 am
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

Thank you!

on Jun. 10 2013 at 11:49 am
buttercup102903 BRONZE, Bellevue, Ohio
2 articles 0 photos 13 comments
it is really good keep up the great work


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