You and the Rain This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

August 31, 2008
Barricaded in the Victorian farmhouse.
They don’t make windows this big anymore.
First I see the sky light up for moments
That expand and swell ever outward, alive.
Later the drops of warm, magic rain –
When it soaks up the pavement it smells just like love.

And as the lightning becomes more frequent
(The sky tinged purple for hours),
I feel so solid, so whole and unreal,
Just thinking of you and the storm.
Where my every atom pulses toward you I follow –
Retracing your footfall to the soft grass outside,
Toward memories of every time we didn’t touch.

And how I know that our lips, distinct and uncertain,
Are at odds with two hearts, so full and mature.
The second embrace boldly and without hesitation,
Entwined like lovers.
Beating as if this storm is the end of the world;
While I know deeply and purely,
That if they were right in their morbid prediction,
All that matters is the feel of the rain;
The rainfall and you.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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Lucy4himnotu said...
Oct. 1, 2011 at 3:54 pm
THis was absolutely beautiful. I saw it in my mind, this beautiful picture of the storm, as well as the comparison to the lover. Well done, beautifully written!
HillaryJo said...
Jul. 4, 2011 at 4:25 pm

This is beautiful! I love the lines "Later the drops of warm, magic rain - /When it soaks up the pavement it smells just like love" Oooh it give me goose bumps! Beautiful description, beautiful imagery, beautiful idea. Just beautiful!


spency said...
Jun. 13, 2011 at 11:13 am
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Sumana2 said...
Feb. 2, 2011 at 2:47 pm
This poem is awesome. This line: "...our lips, distinct and uncertain,/ Are at odds with our two hearts, so full and mature..," kind of reminds me of Romeo and Juliet, especially Romeo. He was very immature, but he knew what he had with Juliet was real and true love.
Homskllet said...
Aug. 9, 2010 at 9:59 am
Very well written. Really great.
MorningStar15 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 23, 2010 at 8:07 pm
this is one of the best poems i have read in a really long time and i adore it deeply :D amazing job!
beautyispower said...
Jan. 1, 2010 at 12:00 am
I love this poem and I luv cloudy weather, it makes me think more. It's when my intelligance and creativity hits me the most.
blackamethyst said...
Apr. 29, 2009 at 10:18 pm
I really like this poem. Rain is my favorite kind of weather. It made me think
yourmom said...
Feb. 13, 2009 at 5:57 pm
i really like this one alot!!!
relientkgirlie replied...
Jun. 11, 2010 at 2:33 pm of the best, simplest, thought out poems I have ever heard. Ahmazing!! :))
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