I look at the world like a window feel distance and beyond my reach. In the real world I am mostly erase can't see my face nor hear me. I am invisible in this world you call reality.But I call it a living nightmare or a world that isn't there. Even thou I am here I feel like I don't belong, reality haven't really accept me as one of it own. There is only one world that will accept me for who I am you call it a dream but it real to me. It the only place were I can breath and feel alive for the first time. It doesn't cause pain either suffering and anyone is invite. You been there before. It were people fantasy and dream grow even more. All you need to do is go to sleep and you there once again. But you can live there forever you need to wake up! It sad I know but it isn't bye forever but see you next time at night farewell.
HazelGraceThis is nice, but a few things: 1. Grammaer kind of messes up the flow 2. You need to try and make your line breaks more deliberate, so they have more effect 3. It's a little reptitive with the language, watch for using 'I" too much 4. Try to end and begin with more of a bang
Overall, nice job and nice poem
Sakuya
I like the idea of this but you do have some spelling and other errors, which can take away from a great piece like this. I think if you connected your imagery together it could become even better
AhtmahKhalsa
B.C.S.The theme was good, but i would check for typos and the tenses if your verbs, it will help things flow a little better, good job!
Hamzawaseem
Picus.
WORDISFOREVERALONEJeane this poem is beautiful. I'm glad i got to read it and I applaud it. Again. Beautiful. -Word
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