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What I Could Never Tell My Mother This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

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What I could never tell my mother
Isn’t her fault; it’s mine
It’s things wrapped inside of me, coiled like wire with the filament exposed
She could accept them – those things – I’m sure
Maybe even love them the way she loves me; little puzzle pieces
That fell out of the box when we were putting it under the sofa
After we almost finished the puzzle together
But I hide them inside my deepest aorta
Keeping them safe because who wants to grab a still-beating heart?
It would kill me to take those secrets out
So my mother may know they exist
But she lets me keep them.
And maybe that’s the real secret, the one that
Shhhh
She doesn’t know –
It’s that I need some secrets of my own.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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Rachet said...
Apr. 28, 2011 at 12:19 pm:
This was Beautiful, Thank you for sharing.
 
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Helene said...
Apr. 13, 2011 at 6:40 pm:
i love your words they make since to me
 
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livelaughlovepraise said...
Apr. 12, 2011 at 1:48 pm:
I love this so much! Keep growing your writing!
 
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RideTheWave said...
Apr. 11, 2011 at 3:39 pm:
This was really good!!!!
 
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LaurennnnThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 9, 2011 at 1:15 am:

This is really good, and I can relate, but I think it could be better if you did a little revising and condenced it a little.

"Say the most you can in the fewest words possible." -Robert Frost.

"Remove the unnessisary so the nessisary can speak." -Mrs. Hambrick (My 7th and 8th grade English teacher; she'd bloody brillant.)

 
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DearAlyssa said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 5:59 pm:
I understand how you feel... There are just thing's I could never tell my mom.
 
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-Selenecullen- said...
Apr. 1, 2011 at 1:54 am:
very beautifully written , kepp up the good work
 
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secrets said...
Mar. 26, 2011 at 10:04 pm:
I have lots of secerts from my mother so i understand where u come from. ur words put it in a view for me tht no one else has. great writin
 
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desmiree said...
Mar. 18, 2011 at 11:55 am:
That was really good the only time I can write poetry is when I'm upset or sad.
 
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C8Star77 said...
Mar. 13, 2011 at 1:57 pm:
Wow. Your talent is amazing, and you definitely have strong emotion behind it. Keep up the great work!
 
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Griffiths1998 said...
Mar. 8, 2011 at 5:41 pm:
i think we all need some secrets of our own. Good Job
 
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Nooneimportant2u said...
Feb. 10, 2011 at 10:14 am:
So deep and profound , very nice, i admire its uniqueness
 
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PerfectMGymnast This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 4, 2011 at 10:04 pm:
i love this especially the last line!! :)
 
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SecrecyGirl15 said...
Jan. 27, 2011 at 12:19 pm:
I totally can relate, great peom keep writing!
 
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abbyb said...
Jan. 19, 2011 at 11:21 am:
I can realte to this poem. Although, my mom does want to know everything about my life. Does she no everything? No, alot, but definately not everything.
 
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netjamie said...
Jan. 13, 2011 at 11:04 pm:
this is great i wish my mom could understand that she doesnt need to know everthing,, but i love this... u should check out my work some time
 
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BlueFoot This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 4, 2011 at 5:08 pm:
Reston Va, such a talent mine! Haha what school did you go to? --I'm from Reston too.
 
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-kristina said...
Dec. 22, 2010 at 8:48 pm:
I like this. i wish my mom would except my secrets. we just arnt that close and it makes me sad. thats y my poems say my heart instead of my boyfriend. id like if you read them n tell me what you think please
 
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marzapan said...
Dec. 15, 2010 at 4:42 pm:
i love it!
 
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AliMallie said...
Nov. 30, 2010 at 11:09 pm:
I love that this is relatable to anyone and has a high degree of mystery, just as secrets do. I'm sure parents feel just as shut out as we do reading this and it's a refreshing viewpoint.
 
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