Daddy's Womb This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.






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Invisiblefigure said...
Sept. 19, 2015 at 12:39 am
Wow, the flow of this work is absolutely stunning! I wanted to press the 'you've got talent' button a million times! Keep writing!
 
Owenh said...
Sept. 17, 2015 at 11:05 am
That was just so beautiful
 
jlain This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 16, 2015 at 5:55 pm
wow. This is great. You got comments back in 2008 and your still getting them today. 7 years later. wow
 
. said...
Sept. 11, 2015 at 7:31 am
WOW that's all I got to say it was intense
 
Colemanl said...
Sept. 6, 2015 at 9:59 pm
Intense, very well written.
 
kozume said...
Aug. 30, 2015 at 7:22 pm
I love the subtle message and the deeper meaning. This poem is amazing.
 
MMickey said...
Aug. 15, 2015 at 12:36 pm
I am in love with this poem
 
lovebug14 said...
Aug. 9, 2015 at 7:19 pm
love it i understand the last 2 parts
 
Pen-dragon said...
Aug. 4, 2015 at 10:26 pm
beautiful...I LOVE IT
 
QueenxB replied...
Aug. 9, 2015 at 5:15 pm
Can you explain the last two lines to me xc
 
MissMia This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 25, 2015 at 5:15 pm
This is absolutely gorgeous
 
SBach said...
Jul. 20, 2015 at 4:29 pm
You have a LOT of talent! This piece is absolutely amazing!
 
theteenland said...
Jul. 18, 2015 at 7:16 pm
Amazing! I really like the words and adjectives you chose to describe everything :)
 
izzywrites said...
Jul. 14, 2015 at 12:51 pm
This is a wonderful piece of work! Keep it up!
 
Hypnos said...
Jul. 12, 2015 at 2:02 pm
SO beautiful!!
 
jennyb2499 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 8, 2015 at 3:12 am
Wow! This is really amazing. I love your tone and the words you choose.
 
emmyreturns_ said...
Jun. 30, 2015 at 5:19 pm
wow. I cannot stop reading this- amazing work!
 
RamonRobertWrightFonseca This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 27, 2015 at 5:20 pm
Yes. Yes. Yes.
 
Alexanderia P. said...
Jun. 18, 2015 at 6:27 pm
So I read this a few times, and then I forgot about it for awhile. In that time I worked on a sketch of a dragon. The dragon was thin, and the bone showed through the scales, along with that, he was wingless. I drew a collar around his neck, and a chain that had been tied around a large stone; as it was connected to the core of the planet. The last I saw of the dragon was his eyes, staring up at the only sky he'd ever see. After about another month, I re read the poem. The last part of the poem ... (more »)
 
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