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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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ACkYeFirstThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 5 at 6:22 pm:
I appreciate the intense emotion of this piece - really creates a connection between reader and work. Good job!
 
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DragonQueenThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 2 at 6:06 pm:
Love it! I really like the essence it gives. XD
 
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oxford123 said...
Apr. 30 at 7:33 am:
Glamorous piece of work!
 
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Asfia said...
Apr. 28 at 4:17 pm:
what happens in the end tell me please????
 
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PoeticPrincess said...
Apr. 28 at 2:08 pm:
Wow this was an amazing poem. Great job!
 
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Lemons4Randi said...
Apr. 23 at 5:54 pm:
A beautifully written piece. Love the idea of it. The whole poem comes together in the last few lines and I think i am in love with this poem. Keep it up
 
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Hells_WillThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 17 at 1:45 pm:
this is amazing!!!!!!! i love it!! i know how it feels to be held back by your parents but its my mom not my dad i dont really know my dad but thats why i love it sssooo much!!!! (sorry about my bad gramer!!)
 
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beanpole said...
Apr. 16 at 2:44 pm:
wow you did a great job!
 
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kyndreyah said...
Apr. 11 at 2:53 pm:
You're a rude person. 
 
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thenightowlwriterThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 10 at 4:40 pm:
Sad but beautiful, as poetry usually is.
 
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C.S.Thompson said...
Apr. 9 at 9:23 pm:
This was a very cool piece to read. I enjoyed the use of imagery. It was little sad, the ending but that's alright because it was symbolic. Nice work.
 
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juliamolly said...
Apr. 7 at 9:42 pm:
Wow. I thought this was beautifuly written and the flow was really spectacular. That said, I think if you elongated this more you would have much more room for an emotional connection with the audience. (Me being very close with my father) Love this piece though and happy writing! 
 
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thatoneguythathateschool said...
Apr. 7 at 2:39 pm:
Like really this is just horrible i threw up a little in my mouth 
 
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thatoneguythathateschool said...
Apr. 7 at 2:29 pm:
This is horrible
 
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MilindaMiller said...
Apr. 5 at 11:59 am:
This is beautiful, I loved it!
 
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superstar_25 said...
Apr. 4 at 9:46 pm:
I hope you all enjoy my poems!
 
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Kathryn S. said...
Apr. 2 at 1:24 pm:
Your word choice was amazing! Some of the rhyme was a little funky but it still worked really well.
 
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Jordan M. said...
Apr. 2 at 8:45 am:
good poem, keep it up!
 
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Daelyn said...
Apr. 2 at 8:42 am:
This piece was amazing! I loved it! 
 
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Juneza-Ann B. said...
Mar. 20 at 9:59 pm:
I like your poem it speaks in volumes and I know it is hard to find the right words to speak to your readers. Well done!
 
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