A Temptation

April 14, 2011
By HomeRunner BRONZE, Altadena, California
HomeRunner BRONZE, Altadena, California
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Favorite Quote:
1. To be or not to be. That is the question.
2. Aim for the moon, even if you miss you will still land among the stars
3. Hell hath no fury like a women scorned
4. "Lover everlasting, what fantasy does not keep dreams awake?"

A temptation so sweet

Angels Weep

The simple act
Holds this pain so unrelenting

Yet you must shed the tear

And you close those eyes


Oh how they cry


Oh how you smile

And die.

The author's comments:
Well, I wrote this many years ago. I was very young so the piece lacks a sufficient amount of changes. Umm, I say this a lot but please comment with your critiques or otherwise.Thank you for reading this! (I'm sorry If I wasted your time.)

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on Jun. 1 2011 at 4:47 pm
xximjustmexx PLATINUM, Oak Forest, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
There's no god. There's no religion. There's only life, what you do with YOUR life, who YOU let affect YOUR life. Bad things happen to everyone, you just have to learn to deal with them.

I liked it. It's very simple, but it says a lot. Good job. Keep writing.

on Jun. 1 2011 at 1:21 pm
thezebrasgray PLATINUM, Taylorsville, Utah
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very very good! nearly perfect! be more confident in yourself, though, thats half the battle!  (You might want to think about making the last line just a tiny bit closer to the rest of the poem, i almost missed it:)


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