"Teardrops, Gunshots"

March 10, 2010
By modern_misfit BRONZE, Woodbridge, Virginia
modern_misfit BRONZE, Woodbridge, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"What we do in this life echoes an eternity."-Gladitor


He loves me, he loves me not
Tick tock, goes the clock
Thinking thoughts, wanting thoughts
These feelings don’t belong to me
There not mine to have, not mine to bleed
No one’s here, their leaving me


The author's comments:
I found the inspiration for this piece by randomly staring into space. The thoughts rolled right out of my head and onto paper. The idea behind this piece is the feeling of emptiness that accompanies a person when their feeling neglected and the yearning for some form of attention.

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on Apr. 23 2010 at 4:54 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

hahaha. you do that. youre welcome..

on Apr. 23 2010 at 11:37 am
thanks for the compliment. i was feeling a bit unsure about the poem since i didn't get as many comments as i anticipated. i think i'll take you up on your offer.

on Apr. 22 2010 at 6:19 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

hey if you write for zuko imma read your stuff. I'm obsessed with ozai-not that I promote his campaign but I wonder what his "voice" would sound like in a poem also. youre a creative writer. one of the few on here.

on Apr. 22 2010 at 4:34 pm
modern_misfit BRONZE, Woodbridge, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"What we do in this life echoes an eternity."-Gladitor

thanks so much for the positive feedback. as for your question i do watch avatar and i love it, can't wait for the movie to come out. i'll strongly consider writing for zuko as he is one of my favorite characters. i can relate to his internal struggle to do the right thing or make his dad happy.

on Apr. 21 2010 at 9:39 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

do you watch avatar on nick? you should write for the fire nation. I'm sure zuko could identify with this. i'm sure he'd like it. i'm sure i like it. and i'm sure of that, and I'm sure of that also.

w.s.f.z SILVER said...
on Mar. 31 2010 at 12:54 pm
w.s.f.z SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
''life is full of mistakes but we got to learn how to pass through them!!''

yup i've had that feeling before.....




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