Deep Within

December 12, 2009
By bamboom212 PLATINUM, Chestnut Ridge, New York
bamboom212 PLATINUM, Chestnut Ridge, New York
23 articles 0 photos 155 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The truth with a bad intent, is worse than any lie you can ever invent."
"You are smarter than you think. You are stronger than you look. You are braver than you feel."


To admire is to love with all your mind.
To love is to adore with every piece of your heart.


I will fight no more.
I'm done running; Chasing after something that won't still be there later.
I've fallen too deep, carefully entangled in mind games I should have outgrown.
This one thing I know from the very center of my being.
From strands of honey-colored hair down to the distinct tips of my toes.
The very edges of my bones
Love gives someone the power to break you.
I'm broken, shattered, convievably.
But I won't give up.
And I won't give in.

I will remain as promised, with my dignity solidly implanted at my side.



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on Mar. 3 2010 at 2:53 pm
bamboom212 PLATINUM, Chestnut Ridge, New York
23 articles 0 photos 155 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The truth with a bad intent, is worse than any lie you can ever invent."
"You are smarter than you think. You are stronger than you look. You are braver than you feel."

thank u soo much 4 the feedback! it took me a minute 2 see which parts u emphasized on, but i completely understand. gr8 advice thxx again!

on Mar. 2 2010 at 9:20 am
Bassoonkelley GOLD, Tampa, Florida
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This piece has a steady rhythm to and a LOT of potential! The only thing I stumbled over while reading were the vague words you used like "something" or "Someone." When a poem is this short, every word has to be selected very carefully. I'd go back and reconstruct those two places, and it'll be soo much stronger!

Really nice work!

on Feb. 22 2010 at 9:12 am
BleedingRose PLATINUM, Frederic, Wisconsin
33 articles 1 photo 378 comments

Favorite Quote:
*The darkness holds infinite possibilities.

(mine)

Well, I also read a bunch of your stuff and you most def. deserve 5 stars! Awesome sauce job! :)

on Feb. 8 2010 at 7:34 pm
bamboom212 PLATINUM, Chestnut Ridge, New York
23 articles 0 photos 155 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The truth with a bad intent, is worse than any lie you can ever invent."
"You are smarter than you think. You are stronger than you look. You are braver than you feel."

oh thank u so much 4 reading my poems! im glad u like it. btw as u prob know ive read alot of ur work 2 & <3 it :D

on Feb. 8 2010 at 10:49 am
BleedingRose PLATINUM, Frederic, Wisconsin
33 articles 1 photo 378 comments

Favorite Quote:
*The darkness holds infinite possibilities.

(mine)

Oh I love this! It's very strong and it just flows! The pic compliments it very nicely. ;) Keep writing!


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