Deep Within

December 12, 2009
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To admire is to love with all your mind.
To love is to adore with every piece of your heart.

I will fight no more.
I'm done running; Chasing after something that won't still be there later.
I've fallen too deep, carefully entangled in mind games I should have outgrown.
This one thing I know from the very center of my being.
From strands of honey-colored hair down to the distinct tips of my toes.
The very edges of my bones
Love gives someone the power to break you.
I'm broken, shattered, convievably.
But I won't give up.
And I won't give in.

I will remain as promised, with my dignity solidly implanted at my side.

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Bassoonkelley This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 2, 2010 at 9:20 am
This piece has a steady rhythm to and a LOT of potential! The only thing I stumbled over while reading were the vague words you used like "something" or "Someone." When a poem is this short, every word has to be selected very carefully. I'd go back and reconstruct those two places, and it'll be soo much stronger!
Really nice work!
bamboom212 replied...
Mar. 3, 2010 at 2:53 pm
thank u soo much 4 the feedback! it took me a minute 2 see which parts u emphasized on, but i completely understand. gr8 advice thxx again!
BleedingRose said...
Feb. 8, 2010 at 10:49 am
Oh I love this! It's very strong and it just flows! The pic compliments it very nicely. ;) Keep writing!
bamboom212 replied...
Feb. 8, 2010 at 7:34 pm
oh thank u so much 4 reading my poems! im glad u like it. btw as u prob know ive read alot of ur work 2 & <3 it :D
BleedingRose replied...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 9:12 am
Well, I also read a bunch of your stuff and you most def. deserve 5 stars! Awesome sauce job! :)
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