When it Rains

October 3, 2009
By Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.


When it rains
It washes away
What’s wet and what
The wetness stained
And drowns what came
To cause me pain
And keep me up
All night and day
And possibly take
My life away
19 horses and 19 men
Knocking on my window pane
And when it rains
It tells the day
No one can come out to play
And that makes the sun say
“I must now dry up the day
And save whats left to be saved”.
And when I look
I have to say
That what I see I can’t explain
What was flooded yesterday
Is now completely drained
And when I say
The sun has came
To shine its rays
On my troubled face
And liven what relentless rain
Had no remorse and washed away
-19 horses and 19 men
Knocking on my window pane.


The author's comments:
this poem is about misconceptions, and how us being the paranoid freaks that we are, assume people are out to get us when really all they want is to get out of the rain.

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on Apr. 17 2013 at 6:16 pm
beccalynn1663 GOLD, West Milford, New Jersey
14 articles 2 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let your smile change the world. Don't let the world change your smile.

you are such a good poet!

Mckay ELITE said...
on Apr. 8 2013 at 3:32 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Simply outstanding. I too short of words to compliment this poem. 

on Mar. 28 2013 at 6:56 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

Ooh....thankment muchly!!!

on Mar. 27 2013 at 1:31 pm
Thecurseofdestiel SILVER, Denton, North Carolina
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That... is amazing

on Feb. 28 2013 at 11:28 pm
you are so fabulous for commentating. Thx so much.

on Feb. 27 2013 at 7:33 pm
Clarabelle SILVER, Caracas, Other
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This poem is amazing, I'm practically in love with it!! I especially like the rhyming scheme - It makes the poem flow very easily

on Jan. 13 2013 at 9:47 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

Why, You're Welcome!!

on Jan. 13 2013 at 12:09 am
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

Thank you so much for commentating. I hope you did your dance.

on Jan. 12 2013 at 4:12 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

Really liked it, as soon as I saw the title , just knew, HAD to read it...the best thing is the ryhming scheme, beautiful,...plus a very nice interpretation of rain... 

on Dec. 28 2012 at 11:57 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

I really love you. Thx.

on Dec. 25 2012 at 6:49 pm
ChobaniLuvinPenguin PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
29 articles 0 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
"What makes the desert beautiful is that somewhere it hides a well."
― Antoine de Saint-Exupéry, The Little Prince

This poem flowed as easy as rain ;) But seriously, amazing job! I totally get your metaphor! It's unique and very creative and deep :) Great job!

W. said...
on Dec. 9 2012 at 3:20 pm
Merci tres beaucoup. U two r forever tha bestees.

on Dec. 6 2012 at 5:06 pm
HateKnuckle SILVER, Peru, New York
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A year later and I now have no idea why I posted that. I love this poem now even though I still have trouble understanding it exactly. I realize it was kinda harsh and I apologize for that. If I can't like it for underastnding it then I can love it for the sounds and rhythm and try to make sense of it literally.

on Dec. 4 2012 at 12:27 pm
starwriter GOLD, Durango, Colorado
17 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
Hearing voices no one else can hear isn't a good sign, even in the wizarding world.
-J. K. Rowling

I love this poem, the first line caught my eye and I knew I had to read it!!! I also really like the ending.

on Nov. 15 2012 at 7:05 pm
BAU.emily SILVER, Bothell, Washington
5 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"evolution takes what we are, and gives us what we will be." ~me

i really liked this, rain is a metiphor i like to revisit alot because its so versatile (that and i live in washington state!) :) i that you repeated similar sentence structure, like the sound of the words "rain, pain, pane, came, save," it made it flow beautifully!! you have GREAT talent my friend!!!!

on Oct. 31 2012 at 2:27 am
TerraCotta GOLD, Cupertino, California
17 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
“A man, who has no conscience, no goodness, does not suffer.”

The perspective of the poem is interesting. Stylistically , it's nothing much, but conceptually, it was extremely well laid out. Keep up the good work!

on Oct. 10 2012 at 11:37 am
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

You are forever loved. Thanks so much for commentating.

keke_curry said...
on Sep. 11 2012 at 8:38 am
keke_curry, Wilmington, North Carolina
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I love this because its so heart felt and I could feel the emotion that was put into it as I read it 

on Aug. 13 2012 at 9:25 am
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

My my captain, its been a long time. Ypur represence is always quite refreshing my dear. Thank you so much for commentating.

on Aug. 12 2012 at 9:39 pm
CaptainFabulous GOLD, Gray Summit, Missouri
17 articles 0 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes I believe in as many as six impossible things before breakfast" - Lewis Carroll

i rlly enjoyed reading this, great poem! liked the "19 horses and 19 men" creative and metaphorical :3 great  job  


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