Shotgun Slumber This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

April 22, 2009
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My face is smushed against the glass –
cheekbone and jawline numb from
the cold, and long hours spent pressed
against the window. Rhythmic breaths
create patches of fog along the contours of my nose and lips.

Out of the corner of my right eye
I catch glimpses of the landscape we
pass by, but I’ve seen it all before.
Concrete barriers and painted lines
keep my driver on course.

Beyond the asphalt and wildflower medians
sprawl cornfields, suburban neighborhoods,
vast parks. Perpetual movement fools me
and for a moment, I am stationary –
free to view the passing still frames
of others’ lives.

Another mile marker and tired eyes flutter –
the endless strings of telephone lines,
cow pastures and landfills blur together
as the lullaby resonating from the spinning
axles beneath my feet sings me to sleep again.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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PeacemakerPanda said...
Jun. 1, 2009 at 10:27 pm
This reminds me of when I was on my way to California to see my love. I understand the feeling. Very lovely.
BloodRose said...
May 31, 2009 at 5:09 pm
this was aa great poem but i dont see how it relates to the title...but otherwise it as amazing!
lovehate29 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 28, 2009 at 11:06 pm
this is beautiful! you are so talented and i like how your words are carefully coordinating with the others...good job!!
FarmGirl said...
May 28, 2009 at 10:45 pm
love it
it was cool
liked the metaphor
brina said...
May 27, 2009 at 12:05 am
very interesting peom:)
Caitlyn said...
May 26, 2009 at 5:55 pm
Awesome, keep writing!!!!
jgb1300 said...
May 26, 2009 at 3:22 pm
This was confusing.
GodsWarrior24 said...
May 21, 2009 at 3:25 pm
hey not a bad poem i think its kinda carzy tho and got alot of vilence i think
KassidyLeigh said...
May 18, 2009 at 9:30 pm
I like the way that this paints a clear picture of whats going on in your head, and that you can picture everything that is going on. Really coll. You should check out 11:11 Memories on teen ink raw!
Tamara*Monta said...
May 18, 2009 at 12:41 am
Great poem put my imagnation (spelling) in to play nice work
Twilightnme said...
May 16, 2009 at 2:28 am
nice job. I really like how the story is written. The title is awesome... and mysterious, i guess. I get the title now... hehe
Renaissance said...
May 14, 2009 at 10:43 pm
One word... BRILLIANT!!!
smilie! said...
May 13, 2009 at 10:04 pm
awesome! i could really picture the landscape.write more!!!!
Dylan R. said...
May 13, 2009 at 9:52 pm
This is one of the best poems I have ever read because it has a great image.
Kendall A. said...
May 12, 2009 at 2:39 am
Great imagery, love it. write some more! :)
IvyGirl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 9, 2009 at 1:12 pm
i am assuming the title, as ChelseyRae already pointed out, is referring to shotgun as the passenger seat of a car, and slumber as falling asleep at the end of the poem
firefly116 replied...
Nov. 24, 2009 at 6:11 am
thank you for saying that! i think ur the 1% of people who read this who actually got that!
tinkerbubbles replied...
Jan. 29, 2010 at 5:37 am
uhm , i got it! :P
wowawesome said...
May 6, 2009 at 1:54 pm
nice poem. i <3 it.
joe S. said...
May 6, 2009 at 5:49 am
Nice poem:)
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