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My face is smushed against the glass –
cheekbone and jawline numb from
the cold, and long hours spent pressed
against the window. Rhythmic breaths
create patches of fog along the contours of my nose and lips.

Out of the corner of my right eye
I catch glimpses of the landscape we
pass by, but I’ve seen it all before.
Concrete barriers and painted lines
keep my driver on course.

Beyond the asphalt and wildflower medians
sprawl cornfields, suburban neighborhoods,
vast parks. Perpetual movement fools me
and for a moment, I am stationary –
free to view the passing still frames
of others’ lives.

Another mile marker and tired eyes flutter –
the endless strings of telephone lines,
cow pastures and landfills blur together
as the lullaby resonating from the spinning
axles beneath my feet sings me to sleep again.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.





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jeanwolf said...
Jan. 16, 2011 at 7:42 pm:

good, keep it up!!

take a look at my work plz!!

 
JMThe-one replied...
Jan. 21, 2011 at 12:19 pm :
Me Too. lol
 
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josephdamian said...
Jan. 16, 2011 at 7:42 pm:
That was amazing
 
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Parafreak said...
Jan. 16, 2011 at 7:17 pm:
i like it :)
 
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foreverpoetryguy said...
Jan. 16, 2011 at 12:23 pm:
Amazing poem.
 
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JMThe-one said...
Jan. 16, 2011 at 11:41 am:
Best I've seen on here in a while. Says a lot since I'm really critical.
 
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alymarie3 said...
Jan. 12, 2011 at 11:43 am:
i'm a little confused, but i do like ur choice of words
 
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Maxwell said...
Dec. 25, 2010 at 5:27 pm:
I believe the title is referring to where the narrator is sitting: in the passenger's seat of the vehicle (shotgun).
 
Love4All replied...
Jan. 16, 2011 at 10:58 am :
i hadnt thought about it that way but now that you point it out, it makes a lot of sense
 
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Kingkhaos said...
Dec. 3, 2010 at 4:44 pm:
could be too that the sleep was "sudden", so it was likened to a shotgun blast
 
knifecalledlust replied...
Mar. 1, 2011 at 3:21 am :
no, its called shotgun slumber because shes in the passenger seat of the car. or "shot gun."
 
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anonmyous said...
Dec. 3, 2010 at 1:57 pm:
i liked it! great use of imagery! Good Job!!!
 
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xXvannieXx said...
Nov. 25, 2010 at 2:41 pm:
I really loved this poem, but I don't get the title?
 
silentvocal replied...
Dec. 3, 2010 at 11:32 am :
im tryin to figure the title out aswell. lol-maybe its just a title open for interpretation-it seems sybolic in relation to the poem to me... :)
 
anonmyous replied...
Dec. 3, 2010 at 1:56 pm :
its like in the seat beside the driver is called 'shotgun' and they're fallign asleep, so the tittle makes sense.
 
JMThe-one replied...
Jan. 16, 2011 at 11:43 am :
The title is good. It makes sense. If people don't get it(they might not be the most intelligent). It is obviously reference to riding shotgun in a car and falling asleep. Although it has more symbolic meaning than that.
 
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bubj98 said...
Nov. 11, 2010 at 7:19 pm:
there is no reason to be so rude.it is great that you express your feelings but there is no reason to put someone down.i agree with pinkypromise23 this is very good poetry.thank you
 
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D-City said...
Nov. 11, 2010 at 8:12 am:
its awesome
 
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Phantom_Girl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 11, 2010 at 7:16 am:
Very well written. And very relatable. It reminds me of all the times I fell asleep on the school bus.
 
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wefellinLAVA said...
Oct. 20, 2010 at 8:55 pm:
Beautifully put together... <3
 
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CammyLashay said...
Oct. 20, 2010 at 9:28 am:
Love it =)
 
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