Make Believe MAG

By Amanda Bush, Milan, IL

We were doomed from the beginning,
Blinded from the start,
But nothing can be done
To fool a happy heart.
With each smile and giggle,
Every embrace and every kiss,
We were shooting toward a happy ending,
And we missed.
Cinderella lost her slipper
And it was never found.
Prince Charming came too late,
Now no one’s sleeping sound.
Pillows are soaking wet,
Hopes are all lost.
No more dancing in the clouds.
Dreams have all been tossed.
The fairy-tale warmth has left us
As winter’s setting in.
The storybook reads the end,
But where should we begin?
Now your heart strives to be broken,
And you long for lonely nights
This time our ship is sinking
We’re going down without a fight.



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SallyW. BRONZE said...
on Jun. 14 2016 at 3:11 pm
SallyW. BRONZE, Atlanta, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"There's no point in being an adult if you can't act childish sometimes." - Doctor Who, The 4th Doctor.

Wow. This is so wonderful, I love it.

on May. 11 2016 at 8:52 pm
dont.cry.little.girl. SILVER, Ooltewah, Tennessee
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Amazing. Well done.

on May. 11 2016 at 12:31 pm
TheMuseEuterpe GOLD, Lafayette, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
Writing is my oxygen. Music is my carbon dioxide. ~Jessica Bell

I love this poem. The allusions are done so well. I got shivers.

LionGrace GOLD said...
on Mar. 6 2016 at 12:50 pm
LionGrace GOLD, Guthrie, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
Yeah, Yeah, life is hard and all that jazz. where's the pizza?

This was amazing. you have such talent! this was beautiful, and told of broken things. I loved it.

on Jan. 22 2016 at 8:02 pm
Northwind89 BRONZE, Bozeman, Montana
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That is Amazing!

on Dec. 9 2015 at 2:53 pm
ImaginationIsImportant SILVER, Mumbai, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I have two favorite quotes:
'Remember it's just a bad day, not a bad life.'
'We were born to be real, not perfect.'

Its an amazing poem...I love how u twist and turn fairy tale love stories to relate to yours. I also love the part where you said 'we were shooting towards a happy ending and we missed'. Its beautiful. The use of metaphors is remarkable. Please continue writing poems like this...you've got great talent :D

PoetryWriter said...
on Nov. 17 2015 at 6:25 pm
PoetryWriter,
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This is an amazing poem. I love the use of the metaphors and I love how you interpreted a well known classic fairytale love story, but twisted it to make it yours. I also love how some people can relate to your poem in a way. I know I can.

P.Brad BRONZE said...
on Oct. 26 2015 at 9:30 pm
P.Brad BRONZE, Solon, Ohio
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soooo many rhetorical devices

XOXONANI GOLD said...
on Oct. 26 2015 at 11:32 am
XOXONANI GOLD, Killeen, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"LIVE,LAUGH,LOVE"

omg i love this!! the metaphors are great and i agree with @futurista12 . I love the part that said "we were shooting stars but we missed"

Ranile said...
on Sep. 12 2015 at 1:44 am
Ranile, Mullins, South Carolina
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Dang are you Augustus cause you sure love metaphors

on Aug. 21 2015 at 2:35 pm
futurista12 ELITE, Far Rockaway, New York
615 articles 1 photo 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And though she be but little, she is fierce."- Shakespeare

I love the whole fairytale experience. I like to write poetry like that, as well. I loved the part that said we were shooting for a happy ending and we missed. This is really beautiful.

on May. 25 2015 at 1:02 am
Katyaini SILVER, Greater Noida, Other
8 articles 0 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is like a chocolate covered chilly....

Some succeed because they're destined to;
Most succeed because they're determined too

I loved the way used winter as a metaphor for sadness, loved your imagery and congrats on getting Published!!

on Apr. 11 2015 at 10:19 am
dizzypotato_202, San Bernardino, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Your anger is like the bubbles in a can of soda. The more you're shaken, the more you want to let it all out. The longer you keep it in though, the greater the size of the eventual explosion- and the flatter the drink at the end." -Linkin Park

Oh my god this is amazing! Love it!!

on Feb. 26 2015 at 12:46 pm
Gabbyyirene GOLD, Winter Garden, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
You have every right to a beautiful life- Selena Gomez

Wow it doesn't surprise me that this is published!

wilds PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 26 2015 at 7:55 am
wilds PLATINUM, Newfane, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Brave is not being fearless but being able to overcome those fears you have

TeenInk.com/poetry/all/article/770241/Is-it-really/ hey can you see mine. its probably not as good as yours though

Nimra BRONZE said...
on Feb. 4 2015 at 10:37 pm
Nimra BRONZE, New York, New York
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Your imagery and metaphors are really good. No wonder you got published! Congratulations!

on Feb. 4 2015 at 8:04 am
Brian110 SILVER, Jonesport, Maine
8 articles 1 photo 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
if life gives you lemons..... squeeze them back in life's eyes!

The reason I read on teen ink are for poems like this, please, wright more poems.

on Jan. 13 2015 at 5:27 pm
Theraforever GOLD, Dubuque, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
And still I rise.

I love the fairytale metaphor and how you carry it through out the poem, its phenomenal and inspirational.

on Jan. 13 2015 at 1:33 pm
HoneyMachine BRONZE, Kaysville, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
I am not a word, I am not a line, I am not a girl that could ever be defined. I am not fly, I am levitation, I represent an entire generation! I came to win, to fight, to conquer, to thrive. I came to win, to survive, to prosper, to rise. -Nicki Minaj

Really good meter for the most part! Wow!

on Jan. 18 2014 at 2:00 pm
theSunfloweredCrow PLATINUM, Green Bay, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"Can't keep my eyes from the circling sky,
Tongue-tied and twisted
Just an earth-bound misfit, I"
~Pink Floyd

"Now is blessed
The rest
remembered "

~Jim Morrison

I love your rhyme scheme and this poem! it's amazing! thanks for sharing. I understood what you were trying to say in your piece and I love it! Good job


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