Is it really

February 25, 2015
By wilds PLATINUM, Newfane, New York
wilds PLATINUM, Newfane, New York
22 articles 0 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
Brave is not being fearless but being able to overcome those fears you have


Is it really love 

When there is no connection

Is it really war 

That some say is the answer

Or can words

Stop a punch from coming 

Is it really fate that chooses your path

Or is it you that can change it



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Pratt BRONZE said...
on Jul. 10 2015 at 8:46 am
Pratt BRONZE, New Delhi, Other
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Wow, gorgeous poem , and amazingly written in short and compact words , from now on you got a die hard fan

wilds PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 9 2015 at 11:11 am
wilds PLATINUM, Newfane, New York
22 articles 0 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
Brave is not being fearless but being able to overcome those fears you have

thank you :). im hoping to get better though

on Jul. 9 2015 at 12:02 am
ThisEmilyDa1 SILVER, BF, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
only a life lived for others is a life worthwhile
-Albert Instien
the only person you should try to be better than is the person you were yesterday.

Simple but meaningful, I think it flows nicely and is very thought provoking.

wilds PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 30 2015 at 9:59 am
wilds PLATINUM, Newfane, New York
22 articles 0 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
Brave is not being fearless but being able to overcome those fears you have

thank you. I'll try to do better next time. again thank u for the tips.

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Mar. 29 2015 at 9:51 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

I think that you could have worded the last line a little differently so that it flows better. Also, I think that if the poem was a bit longer, it could create a more vivid image, therefore making it more memorable. Other than that, I like this a lot, the concept is great. Keep writing!:)

wilds PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 29 2015 at 6:33 pm
wilds PLATINUM, Newfane, New York
22 articles 0 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
Brave is not being fearless but being able to overcome those fears you have

thank you that means a lot to me. and again thanks

on Mar. 29 2015 at 10:06 am
Lysander PLATINUM, Bangalore, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I slay.

its gr8 saw ur message.....u dont need 2 change it............

on Mar. 20 2015 at 9:56 am
PoeticAtheist SILVER, Durham, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"I go to seek a great perhaps."

wow. your words mean so much with having to say so little

wilds PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 2 2015 at 12:41 pm
wilds PLATINUM, Newfane, New York
22 articles 0 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
Brave is not being fearless but being able to overcome those fears you have

thank you. I am Grateful for your comment

on Feb. 27 2015 at 12:39 pm
Be_Free PLATINUM, Longview, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"And Darkness and Decay and the Red Death held illimitable dominion overall." -- The Masque of the Red Death, Edgar Allan Poe

I really like it. It makes you think, and that is a very good thing. Keep up the good work!


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