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Ponderings on My Carpet This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This work has won the Teen Ink contest in its category.

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I settle back with a dull thump
Onto the carpet that should’ve been swept last week.
Oh well.
I had better things to do.
Besides
When I am gone this is how I will be remembered, I think:
The little bits of everything strewn across the floor.
Only a bit of dirt or a ragged thread left for someone else to stumble over,
But to some sentimental soul, it could mean that time we went to the creek
And laughed all night, the only souvenir the mud on our shoes.
Or the day I noticed my favorite jeans were frayed at the cuffs
And left them that way, only to have that ragged thread fall,
Marking something, some small moment of my life
Pressed into the carpet for all to see.
So there it is,
My little carpet collage –
Bits of this and that,
Bits of memories,
Bits of my life –
Taking refuge in the protective crevices of my carpet.
How could I destroy this with one sweep of a vacuum?
…You’re not buying it?
All right, I’ll sweep the floor.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

This work has won the Teen Ink contest in its category. This piece won the September 2008 Teen Ink Poetry Contest.





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spency said...
Jun. 13, 2011 at 11:16 am:
5/5 good job...visit me comment and rate
 
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SKSK1214 said...
Jan. 10, 2011 at 11:03 pm:
LOL great work. very good :)
 
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whatireallythink said...
Oct. 10, 2010 at 1:41 pm:
I really really liked this.... I like the twist at the end. :D
 
KrystalT replied...
Nov. 26, 2010 at 1:51 pm :
This was really funny
 
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S. said...
Sept. 6, 2010 at 2:32 pm:
Fantastic! At first it sounds like a horrid attempt at being "deep," but in the end, it's just what any teen would do to get out of vacuuming. I loved the funny ending. It put a big smile on my face.
 
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aDreamer said...
Sept. 6, 2010 at 2:19 am:

awesome. i like how its really deep and profound, and then at the end it gives you a smile:) great job, keep it up.

read some of mine? :)

 
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DiamondsIntheGrass This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 24, 2010 at 2:00 pm:
love how sentimental it is and then you have that slightly random and humorus ending.  super poem!
 
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desi95 said...
Jun. 26, 2010 at 9:14 pm:
amazing, I felt the same way, like everything was  ment to stay the same, it made me laff at the end too :)
 
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pinkypromise23 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 10, 2010 at 10:42 am:
great job...made me smile(;
 
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shafer15 said...
Apr. 27, 2010 at 9:35 pm:
I thought this was very inspiring and it sounded like you were trying to explain that somehow we all want to leave some part of us behind and sometimes memories are all we have. And for that I absolutly loved it!!
 
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xxMissCinixx said...
Apr. 24, 2010 at 10:27 pm:
Such a creative poem! i love it so much.
 
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aspiring.author.09 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 20, 2010 at 7:19 pm:
This was very misleading to me, in an incredibly humorous and satisfying way! I thought you were going to rant about your lover or something, and instead it was like an excuse to your mother or roommate. Clever! I love it!
 
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MorningStar15 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 23, 2010 at 8:17 pm:
i <3 it i<3 it i <3 it
 
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Corinnee<3 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 6, 2009 at 8:26 pm:
This is a very great poem! I really liked it and sort of got the message:) That was quite creative!!
 
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<3::wish4wings::<3 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 16, 2009 at 8:16 pm:
lol i like this=]
 
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SoccerGrl517 said...
Feb. 15, 2009 at 9:27 pm:
I liked it. It was good and funny. It makes you smile and laugh. :)
 
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AndThisIsReal said...
Jan. 23, 2009 at 3:27 pm:
Wow, this make me laugh.
I really liked it, no lie.
It was simple and light, wich I usually don't like, but I did.
:)
 
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kianapearl said...
Dec. 20, 2008 at 8:13 am:
LOVE IT!!
 
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kianapearl said...
Dec. 19, 2008 at 4:38 am:
Great poem. Defintely makes the reader smile...Keep writing:)
 
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swinginme! said...
Dec. 14, 2008 at 6:51 am:
great! i loved the comic affect it had- brilliance! =]
 
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