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Eternity

It was at that place by the sea,
that I met him and he met me.
And the sun always shone on the sand
as we ran together hand in hand.

It was at that place by the sea
that I left him and he left me.
Because we were meant to sail away
until we would meet again someday

It was at that time when I missed the sea
that I thought of him and he thought of me.
And I closed my eyes and saw the time
when I was his and he was mine.

It was at that second when I smelled the sea
that I missed him and he missed me.
Because even though we were miles apart
I could always feel him in my heart.

It was at that minute when I heard the sea
that I longed for him and he longed for me.
So I fell to the ground and gravely cried
that we would end up side by side.

It was at that time when I saw the sea
that I called for him and he called for me.
So I set out on my quest to find
my lover I had left behind.

It was at that place by the sea
that I saw him and he saw me.
And when I was finally in his hold,
all our love began to unfold.

It was at that place by the sea
that I loved him and he loved me.
Our love was pure, our heart was one
and we lived together in the land of the sun.

It was at that place by the sea
that we had met our destiny.
And together we lived on happily
loving each other for eternity.




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Bookwormwriter said...
Sept. 3, 2010 at 9:14 pm:

to any and all who see this, please read, comment and rate my work!  no one seems to want to comment on it.  :( thanks!

this is definetly my favorite so far.  i love the "i loved him and he loved me, i met him and he met me, i missed him and he missed me" they just made the poem sparkle!!!

 
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Canaan said...
Aug. 19, 2010 at 12:22 am:
instant favorite here. I definitely can see the Poe inspiration here, but I really admire the way you managed to get the rhyme just right, so the last stanza was all the same. Oh, not to mention that this is beautiful in the extreme.
 
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ForeverknownasCheyenneThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 1, 2010 at 8:08 pm:
This is my favorite piece by you. Excellent job. Pure Beauty.
 
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Danica said...
Jul. 27, 2010 at 5:33 pm:
This is amazing and so sweet! I love it and think it's awesome that you got the idea from Poe.  Check out some of my stuff if you ever have the chance! I'd love the feedback :)
 
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ericers123 said...
Jun. 6, 2010 at 4:52 pm:
I am like, in love with your stuff!
 
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Boosflash This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 11, 2010 at 4:33 pm:
youre the best. now sit back and read the 6th and 7th lines to yourself over and over and let the brilliant rhyming scheme soak in so you can pay tribute to your geniusness. 5 stars captain.
 
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HeronHero said...
May 11, 2010 at 3:19 pm:
From the start it reminded me of one of my favorite poems, Annabel Lee by Edgar Allen Poe. Were you by any chance inspired by that poem when writting this? It's a lovely peice! Well both are great, your poem is like the happy version of Poe's poem!:)
 
dreamer_believerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 11, 2010 at 4:53 pm :
i was wondering if anyone was going to catch that!! (: actually yes, i did get the idea from Annabel Lee. it's a great peice, although i decided to go a bit more romantic and sweet rather than morbid and disturbing!! (: thanks for cathcing that and for your comment!!
 
HeronHero replied...
May 11, 2010 at 10:36 pm :
hahaha you bet, I really enjoyed reading it!:)
 
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1Corinthians13:4_8 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 26, 2010 at 7:31 pm:
wow again i am left speechless. you really have a way with words.
 
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tennisislovee34 said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 9:03 pm:
I really like this one! I like the repition and rhyming and flow. I think it also shares with us a good story. Keep writing, you have some true talent :)
 
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found_my_dream(: This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 1, 2010 at 8:34 am:
i loveeeeeeeeeeeee it (: its very nicely writen.
 
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Ebony_Rose said...
Mar. 22, 2010 at 8:10 am:
I love it :)
 
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yesimdarrian101 said...
Mar. 21, 2010 at 12:54 pm:
wow, this was really amazing. you are truly good at making the words flow and rhyme, and keeping up the same patterns. really lovely(:
 
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Doyouhavetheories This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 21, 2010 at 6:55 am:
This is really nice. I think the rhyme scheme adds a sort of...I don't know how to explain it. Like this poem was written by an Oldie But A Goodie like Lewis Caroll, or even William Wordsworth.
 
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kales97 said...
Feb. 20, 2010 at 7:05 pm:
this was amazing, so cute! enjoyed reading it! keep up the good work.
 
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annexgrey This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 4:23 am:
One word: Wonderful.
 
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Ink4Blood said...
Feb. 14, 2010 at 2:51 am:
this was amazing!!!! the repetiton and rhymes make it even better! (ps thank you so much for the comment you left me! it means alot!=))
 
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***Rain*** said...
Jan. 23, 2010 at 4:11 pm:
I like how you used repition in this. Its another amazing work. I'm going to keep an eye on your writing.
 
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write4life said...
Jan. 21, 2010 at 10:41 pm:
i really love this! it's sweet, but not in a sappy "oh-my-gosh-i'm-desperately-in-love-with-you" way. i could visualize everything that was going on. keep it up :)
 
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