Eternity

September 1, 2009
By jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."


It was at that place by the sea,
that I met him and he met me.
And the sun always shone on the sand
as we ran together hand in hand.

It was at that place by the sea
that I left him and he left me.
Because we were meant to sail away
until we would meet again someday

It was at that time when I missed the sea
that I thought of him and he thought of me.
And I closed my eyes and saw the time
when I was his and he was mine.

It was at that second when I smelled the sea
that I missed him and he missed me.
Because even though we were miles apart
I could always feel him in my heart.

It was at that minute when I heard the sea
that I longed for him and he longed for me.
So I fell to the ground and gravely cried
that we would end up side by side.

It was at that time when I saw the sea
that I called for him and he called for me.
So I set out on my quest to find
my lover I had left behind.

It was at that place by the sea
that I saw him and he saw me.
And when I was finally in his hold,
all our love began to unfold.

It was at that place by the sea
that I loved him and he loved me.
Our love was pure, our heart was one
and we lived together in the land of the sun.

It was at that place by the sea
that we had met our destiny.
And together we lived on happily
loving each other for eternity.


The author's comments:
This piece actually isn't written about any particular guy in my life. I wrote it to express how it feels to leave someone behind, then the feelings of being reunited. Enjoy :) oh and please comment

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on Sep. 16 2014 at 7:54 am
AmazinGracey PLATINUM, Wilmington, Delaware
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Definitely a favorite.

on Sep. 3 2010 at 9:14 pm
Bookwormwriter SILVER, Centerville, Ohio
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to any and all who see this, please read, comment and rate my work!  no one seems to want to comment on it.  :( thanks!

this is definetly my favorite so far.  i love the "i loved him and he loved me, i met him and he met me, i missed him and he missed me" they just made the poem sparkle!!!


Canaan BRONZE said...
on Aug. 19 2010 at 12:22 am
Canaan BRONZE, Egremont, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"There is in truth no past, only a memory of the past. blink your eyes, and the world you see next did not exist when you closed them. Therefore the only appropriate state of the mind is surprise. The only appropriate state of the heart is joy. The sky you see now, you have never seen before. The perfect moment is now. Be glad of it."
~Terry Pratchett

instant favorite here. I definitely can see the Poe inspiration here, but I really admire the way you managed to get the rhyme just right, so the last stanza was all the same. Oh, not to mention that this is beautiful in the extreme.

on Aug. 1 2010 at 8:08 pm
cheyenneduhon PLATINUM, Lumberton, Texas
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This is my favorite piece by you. Excellent job. Pure Beauty.

Danica SILVER said...
on Jul. 27 2010 at 5:33 pm
Danica SILVER, Avondale, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
"It is our choices, that show who we truly are, far more than our abilities." -- Albus Dumbledore

This is amazing and so sweet! I love it and think it's awesome that you got the idea from Poe.  Check out some of my stuff if you ever have the chance! I'd love the feedback :)

on Jun. 6 2010 at 4:52 pm
ericers123 GOLD, Chester, Other
13 articles 3 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People never change, circumstances do."- Me.

I am like, in love with your stuff!

on May. 11 2010 at 10:36 pm
AlexandraVasari PLATINUM, Fort Stewart, Georgia
28 articles 4 photos 174 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing songs is super intimate. It's a bit like getting naked"~ Gwen Stefani

hahaha you bet, I really enjoyed reading it!:)

on May. 11 2010 at 4:53 pm
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

i was wondering if anyone was going to catch that!! (: actually yes, i did get the idea from Annabel Lee. it's a great peice, although i decided to go a bit more romantic and sweet rather than morbid and disturbing!! (: thanks for cathcing that and for your comment!!

on May. 11 2010 at 4:33 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

youre the best. now sit back and read the 6th and 7th lines to yourself over and over and let the brilliant rhyming scheme soak in so you can pay tribute to your geniusness. 5 stars captain.

on May. 11 2010 at 3:19 pm
AlexandraVasari PLATINUM, Fort Stewart, Georgia
28 articles 4 photos 174 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing songs is super intimate. It's a bit like getting naked"~ Gwen Stefani

From the start it reminded me of one of my favorite poems, Annabel Lee by Edgar Allen Poe. Were you by any chance inspired by that poem when writting this? It's a lovely peice! Well both are great, your poem is like the happy version of Poe's poem!:)

brie13 GOLD said...
on Apr. 26 2010 at 7:31 pm
brie13 GOLD, Sparks, Nevada
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Favorite Quote:
What is the meaning of life? -- To live ( Mr.Swigart- Bio Teacher)

wow again i am left speechless. you really have a way with words.

on Apr. 14 2010 at 9:03 pm
tennisislovee34 GOLD, Sterling Heights, Michigan
15 articles 3 photos 91 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Every moment of your life, you're writing. Even in your dreams, you're writing. When you walk the halls in this school you meet various people and you write furiously in your head." -Frank McCourt

I really like this one! I like the repition and rhyming and flow. I think it also shares with us a good story. Keep writing, you have some true talent :)

on Apr. 1 2010 at 8:34 am
shelby_kat DIAMOND, Warren, Ohio
72 articles 3 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can sum up everything I've learned about life in three words; it goes on." -Robert Frost

i loveeeeeeeeeeeee it (: its very nicely writen.

on Mar. 22 2010 at 8:10 am
Ebony_Rose PLATINUM, Hot Springs, Arkansas
21 articles 0 photos 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The simplest way that i can understand therapy is that we're born a certain
way, we're taught to be something different, and we spend our whole lives
trying to unravel it and ultimately align ourselves with who we really are." ~Billy Corgan

I love it :)

on Mar. 21 2010 at 12:54 pm
yesimdarrian101 BRONZE, Millville, New Jersey
3 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything may not be perfect, but at least we tried." Stephen Jerzak/Chase Coy

wow, this was really amazing. you are truly good at making the words flow and rhyme, and keeping up the same patterns. really lovely(:

on Mar. 21 2010 at 6:55 am
claudiathewho SILVER, West Tisbury, Massachusetts
8 articles 1 photo 43 comments
This is really nice. I think the rhyme scheme adds a sort of...I don't know how to explain it. Like this poem was written by an Oldie But A Goodie like Lewis Caroll, or even William Wordsworth.

kales97 said...
on Feb. 20 2010 at 7:05 pm
this was amazing, so cute! enjoyed reading it! keep up the good work.

on Feb. 19 2010 at 4:23 am
taintedannex GOLD, Hong Kong, Other
15 articles 5 photos 166 comments

Favorite Quote:
The truth is that at some point, everyone's going to hurt you. You just have to decide who's worth the pain.

Some say having something to lose is what makes you vulnerable. I believe that having something to lose only makes you stronger.

One word: Wonderful.

on Feb. 14 2010 at 2:51 am
Love_Kills_the_Blind PLATINUM, Fort Collins, Colorado
23 articles 5 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never regret anything, at one point its exactly what you wanted."

this was amazing!!!! the repetiton and rhymes make it even better! (ps thank you so much for the comment you left me! it means alot!=))

on Jan. 23 2010 at 4:11 pm
VampiericRain GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
12 articles 0 photos 137 comments

Favorite Quote:
Would you like a side of epic with that fail?

I like how you used repition in this. Its another amazing work. I'm going to keep an eye on your writing.


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