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Eternity

September 1, 2009
By jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."


It was at that place by the sea,
that I met him and he met me.
And the sun always shone on the sand
as we ran together hand in hand.

It was at that place by the sea
that I left him and he left me.
Because we were meant to sail away
until we would meet again someday

It was at that time when I missed the sea
that I thought of him and he thought of me.
And I closed my eyes and saw the time
when I was his and he was mine.

It was at that second when I smelled the sea
that I missed him and he missed me.
Because even though we were miles apart
I could always feel him in my heart.

It was at that minute when I heard the sea
that I longed for him and he longed for me.
So I fell to the ground and gravely cried
that we would end up side by side.

It was at that time when I saw the sea
that I called for him and he called for me.
So I set out on my quest to find
my lover I had left behind.

It was at that place by the sea
that I saw him and he saw me.
And when I was finally in his hold,
all our love began to unfold.

It was at that place by the sea
that I loved him and he loved me.
Our love was pure, our heart was one
and we lived together in the land of the sun.

It was at that place by the sea
that we had met our destiny.
And together we lived on happily
loving each other for eternity.


The author's comments:
This piece actually isn't written about any particular guy in my life. I wrote it to express how it feels to leave someone behind, then the feelings of being reunited. Enjoy :) oh and please comment

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on Jan. 21 2010 at 10:41 pm
write4life GOLD, Macon, Georgia
12 articles 0 photos 45 comments
i really love this! it's sweet, but not in a sappy "oh-my-gosh-i'm-desperately-in-love-with-you" way. i could visualize everything that was going on. keep it up :)

emilyj93 GOLD said...
on Jan. 20 2010 at 5:35 pm
emilyj93 GOLD, Naperville, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 22 comments
This is a really interesting poem! It has such great rhythm and flows smoothly. It's passionate and at the same time dignified. Keep writing!

Bliss SILVER said...
on Jan. 2 2010 at 9:57 pm
Bliss SILVER, Poland, Ohio
8 articles 0 photos 18 comments
Wow, this blew me away. it wasnt really sappylove or short and sweet. but it took me on a journey. very fine poetry.

on Nov. 30 2009 at 11:17 am
soinlove SILVER, Parish, New York
5 articles 0 photos 15 comments
this is soo good as i read it it one person shot into my minde and i agree this is amazing .......

ps

thanck you for commenting my sruff also it was so nice what u said. thancks again

on Nov. 30 2009 at 1:02 am
Shawntae90 GOLD, Sunnyvale, California
18 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Every saint has a past, every sinner has a future" Oscar Wilde

THIS WAS SOOOOO GOOD!! Thank you for your nice comment on my poem. It was really sweet, and you are truly gifted.

on Nov. 29 2009 at 6:56 pm
supergrrrl_4808 SILVER, Farrell, Colorado
7 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
Stand your ground. Don't fire unless fired upon, but if they mean to have a war,Let it begin Here.

story of my lifee!!!

ahaha i agree with everyone who commented!

this is def my fave of ur work that ive read so far!!!

and thanx for commenting on mine X)

on Nov. 28 2009 at 11:04 pm
talia_is_happy GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
18 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who mind- don't matter, and the people who matter- don't mind."
-Dr. Seuss

That was beautiful, and it does almost reach that explanation of reuniting again. I loved it.

on Nov. 28 2009 at 11:03 pm
talia_is_happy GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
18 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who mind- don't matter, and the people who matter- don't mind."
-Dr. Seuss

That was beutiful, and it does almost reach that explanation of reuniting again. I loved it.

Meru21 GOLD said...
on Nov. 28 2009 at 2:12 am
Meru21 GOLD, Desert Hot Springs, California
17 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If I could be any part of you,
I'd be your tears;
To be conceived in your heart,
Born in your eyes,
Live on your cheeks,
And die on your lips."

Out of all your poems I've read so far, I think this is my favorite. Beautiful. Definitely beautiful. I love that it tells a story and doesn't lose the emotion. <3

mee-mee SILVER said...
on Nov. 24 2009 at 5:33 pm
mee-mee SILVER, Orlando, Florida
6 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"we all have dreams. but always remember with that dream comes a star. trust in yourself, believe in who you are. with nothing but confidence you will go far."
-mee-mee hoskins






quote written by:mee mee hoskins

i like this poem. its gentle and peaceful. i like how ur art went right along with your poem. lol :) once again niiice.

on Nov. 4 2009 at 11:47 pm
RheaD.Ravenfinger BRONZE, Juneau, Alaska
4 articles 0 photos 94 comments

Favorite Quote:
1 Corinthians 13:4-8

Very beautiful. Please comment on my poems and rate them! Thanks.

on Oct. 24 2009 at 7:16 pm
justjessie GOLD, Lakeland, Florida
18 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
if i cant be something to someone then i want to be nothing to everyone

i really like this, very cute and easy to understand. but still not immature. its great and i like it!!!

on Oct. 22 2009 at 10:49 am
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

wow vry good...its well written...n thanx for commenting on my poem!

on Oct. 21 2009 at 3:15 pm
Ashlie94 BRONZE, Peru, Kansas
4 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't give up and don't give in.. cause the info you give out,you can't take back in.

Amazing! Lol it relates to my friend. She went on a cruise and met this guy and they still talk but she fell for him and he fell for her. Lol I'll have to show her this. Anyways KEEP WRITING!

-Ashlie

on Oct. 9 2009 at 3:36 pm
Jessica... BRONZE, Hephzibah, Georgia
3 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whatever you do in life will be insignificant, but it's very important that you do it. Because nobody else will. Like when someone comes into your life and half of you says you're nowhere near ready, but the other half says: make him yours forever.

this is a really good poem. i could really imagine the feelings and the images coming from this poem. i felt that the poem was speaking to me, because i've been in that situation, so like i said, i really enjoyed the poem. :) keep up with the amazing writing, and thank you for the comment! :)

on Oct. 4 2009 at 7:12 pm
choirchic101 SILVER, Norwalk, California
9 articles 0 photos 196 comments

Favorite Quote:
in order for God to use all of you you have to be completely broken

i liked the way you started each stanza with repeating the first line. it was really good

on Oct. 4 2009 at 10:42 am
icguf615 BRONZE, Mission Viejo, California
4 articles 0 photos 35 comments
awww that was cute

on Oct. 1 2009 at 8:29 pm
PinkPrincess GOLD, Wellington, Florida
17 articles 0 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
I think therefore I am

i really like this poem even though its kind of repetitive it has a way of rolling of the tongue great job!

Braidy BRONZE said...
on Sep. 26 2009 at 1:55 pm
Braidy BRONZE, Helper, Utah
1 article 0 photos 7 comments
As you know, this is my favorite. :) you are a great writer and i love your creative ideas you have in this poem. it flows so smoothly, it just perfect! i love it. :)

love, braidy. :)

and sorry it took me so long to get to comment your work, i haven't gotten on this for a while.

on Sep. 12 2009 at 9:31 pm
anotherromanctic PLATINUM, Wilmington, North Carolina
29 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If it's not okay, then it's not over." - Anonymous

this is great. it's simple, it flows, and it's meaning is clear. awesome job(: