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By Anonymous, GreatFalls, MT
Perfect Tragedy
Summary: This book is about a girl who finds out she is supposed to save the world from a vampire apocalypse.
NNNEEEOOO11 It seems dark, but interesting... almost like a modern "Hunter Games". I'm interested to see where your story will go next. Still, I reccomend adding a little more emotion (shock, disgust, hatred) to some of these scenes, unless you want it to be dark and disconnected from the reader, which is fine also (and also one of my preferred styles of writing). But, a bit more emotion would be good too. Besides that, it is very interesting and I look forward towards reading the next chapter!
PerfectTragedyThank you for the commentary and there is more emotion in it but this is just a flash back so its made to be kinda disconnected from the character at the moment.
Alright, that makes sense. The disconnection itself allows the reader to react on their own in ttheir own emotions anyway, so it's still good. Cant wait tilll your next chapter!
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