When You Say Nothing At All

March 13, 2012
By Atl.Braves03 BRONZE, Tampa, FL, Florida
Atl.Braves03 BRONZE, Tampa, FL, Florida
4 articles 0 photos 77 comments

Favorite Quote:
God is God and I am not
I can only see a part
Of this picture he's painting
God is God and I am man
I will never understand
Because only God is God


Summary:

Amari is strange. He walks with a limp, has one lazy, and a hunched back. Despite this, he is kind and intelligent and with the help of his understanding brother and beautiful girl he happily makes his way through life. Than everything changes.

Tags: Betrayal


Nic R.

When You Say Nothing At All


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on May. 15 2012 at 8:51 pm
Hibiscus SILVER, Milwaukee, Wisconsin
9 articles 1 photo 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"None of us can do great things. But we can do small things with great love." - Mother Teresa

 It was really good! I loved the vived imagery; I could picture the scene. One thing you could work on is to keep your verbs in the same tense. (for example, in the 1st paragrach)  It makes your story more powerful and keeps it moving

on May. 15 2012 at 8:50 pm
Hibiscus SILVER, Milwaukee, Wisconsin
9 articles 1 photo 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"None of us can do great things. But we can do small things with great love." - Mother Teresa

 t was really good! I loved the vived imagery; I could picture the scene. One thing you could work on is to keep your verbs in the same tense. (for example, in the 1st paragrach)  It makes your story more powerful and keeps it moving. 

on May. 15 2012 at 7:19 pm
boringbrunette BRONZE, Hahaha, Illinois
2 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
either lead me, follow me, or get outta my way!!! (if i could so humbly implore you)

i LOVE this story! the detail you put into Amari is AMAZING! cant wait till you write more!

on May. 6 2012 at 1:09 am
teenwriter0804, Plano, Texas
0 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The world will never die, only the people in it."

i have to say that this has the potential to be published as a book someday! just keep working with your heart and that just might happen! looking forward to reading more(:

on Apr. 30 2012 at 3:31 pm
Atl.Braves03 BRONZE, Tampa, FL, Florida
4 articles 0 photos 77 comments

Favorite Quote:
God is God and I am not
I can only see a part
Of this picture he's painting
God is God and I am man
I will never understand
Because only God is God

Aww, thanks Kestrel. It's funny that you say that because I'm actually working on a full length novel for this one right now. I started it yesterday and I'm about 30 pages in so it should be finished before too long. Thank you so much for the encouraging comments! :)

on Apr. 30 2012 at 2:36 pm
Kestrel PLATINUM, Warrenton, Virginia
30 articles 11 photos 193 comments

Favorite Quote:
-There are more things in heaven and earth than are dreamt of in your philosophy. (Shakespeare, Hamlet)

I love the way you write, but would you please write more? As in, not necessarily more stories, just longer ones. I know this is difficult (believe me, I know, I just don't have the guts to submit my stories like you do) but please do! I'd appreciate it, and I would certainly read the longer versions.


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