Teen Ink

This is AMAZING! I absolutly love the plot and the way you describe it! EXCELLENT! Hey if you don't mind, could you read my book? It's called Demoness. I would greatly appreciate it.

I only read chapter 1. No offense, but I thought of your descriptions of high school as descriptions of middle school. They were childish and judgemental. people aren't in those particular groups in High school anymore because (keyword) we've GROWN UP

Ok I have revised the begining of this story and will post better chapters in a bit.

new chapter posted!! I know its short, but im still editing the first 12 chapters.

i literally check for more every other day! i love this so much! Keep up the amazing writing! please check out my poem, too!

U MUST ADD MORE NOW PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!

AMAZING! please read mine too!!!!!!

 

I like this story a lot but I think you've got to many variables going at the moment without entirely connecting them in my opinion. Like her dad rapes her, Bentley's eyes change, she's having weird dreams that are coming true, Bentley (newly meeting her) is going to buy her an expensive dress, and you've got the building tension with KC..sorry to be overcritical but it might be hard to some readers to still follow and remember that Bentley and KC are from the beginning too (that's what i got fr... (more »)

I love everything about this! There needs to be more :)

This is amazing! "Bitter, sweet and strange/ Finding you can change/ Learning you were wrong." sorry but i watched Beauty and The Beast the other night and this is just.....wow!! update!

Anyone who wears dinosaur footie-pajamas is obviously cool.

I love the poems! great job!

I love this story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (:

the new chapter is chapter 2

so..um yeah, youre right next to me ^_^...btw i like your story

oh really! so its like chosing over which guy? ohhhh this is gonna be a good story!

Oh my gosh i love chapter 9!  It gives my shivers when they kiss and she hates it! lol please keep writing a can't wait to see what happenes to her and that dress *wink wink*

I'm re-writting some chapters. should have them up in two weeks tops <3

Omg... this book is amazing!! please keep writing! but i couldt read chapter 12 becasue my computer is stupid -_- lol but anyways it is awesome!

I AM IN LOVE WITH THIS BOOK! Keep writing. You're an amazing writer.

I'm back in school, so expect more chapters soon :)

I am loving this story!!! I can't wait for the next chapter! 

I still love reading this i can't wait for the new chapter XD

wow,just realized this was in the realistic fiction section...oops. this story really isn't going to be too realistic. i plan to have KC cursed and Misti the only one to break it. Hope you guys don't mind.

Are K.C. and Bentley the same person?

Hey Vanendra!! Just a couple comments...

First of all, your first sentence isn't very intriguing. It ought to hook your readers, drawing them in, and yours doesn't really do that for me. I understand, as I am terrible at that, but it was just one of many errant thoughts.

Also, you have a few grammatical/spelling errors. The ones I found are mainly something like you using "past" when it ought to be "passed" etc.

I also think it's a little out of the blue that Bentley just... (more »)