Gone Like November

August 9, 2015
By Hollis796, Columbus, Ohio
Hollis796, Columbus, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
We meet no ordinary people in our lives. -C.S. Lewis


Summary:

June and Marcy are unlikely friends, but they spend all their time together. They take desperate measeures just to make sure they're still friends. And along the way they befriend Winnie, a shy girl with her own set of problems. They work through what they can together and don't let go of their friendship. Until the incident.


Elizabeth O.

Gone Like November


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Hollis796 said...
on Aug. 19 2015 at 6:27 pm
Hollis796, Columbus, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
We meet no ordinary people in our lives. -C.S. Lewis

Thank you so much for commenting!!! Thank you for the corrections, I guess I didn't think about that. As for making the story short instead of letting it be longer, well I guess I knew that. I feel like I didn't know how to not make the story feel hurried and spread it out more. That's something I need to work on. So thank you for the advice, NarutosimG

on Aug. 18 2015 at 6:44 pm
NarutosimG GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
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Explain a bit more why they choose such a small place to live in. Like for example if it was so small and can not see it in a map barely how did they spotted it did they hear about, a family member died and left them the house, or was it fate that led them there( Which i mean the husband or wife close their eyes and under their finger the name of the town. Not only that but explain what memories they had to keep the kitchen and house the same way. Like did they found something from the previous owner that was quite unique something like that in a way or in this case what were the old days how did it form. Another one is why the child is prejudice did she get it from her father in a way since she learn from her mother how to be kinder to all people. Other than that I can say your story is very interesting and if you change it just a little bit more it will be great. I feel like you were trying to make this story shorter in a way when it could've been longer.




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