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I sat at work, contemplating whether it was worth leaving just to get home. I struggled to answer my own question. The night was stormy and the road was limited on visibility. A huge snow storm had accumulated while I was working, I didn’t know if I could face the treacherous road ahead. After being reassured by my manager, I decided I would take my time, crawling through the snow, and make it home safely. I got on the road, and found some tracks, planted my tires firmly in them, and didn’t look back. My heart was pounding; I wanted everything to be fine. An SUV soon pulled out in front of me, and made my sight easier, to watch her tail lights in the distance. I followed her to the merge after the light at Ponderosa, and she went in front of me. She must have been getting comfortable with the driving conditions because she took off, over the hill, her tail lights out of my view. I kept at my own pace, I needed to stay cautious. As I came to the peak of the hill, my eyes reconnected with her tail lights, I felt a sense of security again. In a split second, her brakes lights radiated the brightest red, and her car jerked right. I could just imagine her sliding down that hill, all I could do was freeze. Quickly her lights dimmed again, being hidden by the sideways snow, and I saw her car veer to the left, across the oncoming traffic lane. She hit the edge of the road, it dipped down, and so did her car. Her car bounced out of the slight ditch and went rolling up the hill. My car was stopped, I couldn’t move, I was numb. Her car was not stopped, it was not done ripping her every direction, knocking her unconscious, no, it had not done enough damage. The car turned as it hit the top of the hill, coming back down right towards my car. I could see nothing more than headlights coming right for the driver side window. Still, I could not move, if this was my fate, I would not interrupt. Her car came veering down the hill, with nothing in its path but me. Again, her car hit the slight ditch, and jumped out, no wheels on the ground. Her, with no control, she flew through the air, coming back to the road her tires slowed down. The car parked, t-bone to mine, with not even enough room to get out of my car. I looked, the car was turned off, all I could see, was her, this innocent victim, hanging over her steering wheel.





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skibum said...
Oct. 3, 2010 at 4:11 pm
Great job Ashley!  Girls in small cars do not mix well with snow on our roads....daddy needs to get you an SUV...maybe buy an extra one for me too!
 
Traci said...
Oct. 2, 2010 at 4:30 am
Ashley, Your Grandma directed me here to read your story and I'm very glad she did, this is excellent! Keep up the great work :)
 
Grandpa "M" said...
Sept. 30, 2010 at 12:47 pm
Outstanding story Ashley!  It caught my interest and I wanted to read on to see what happened.  Keep Up the good work Kiddo.  Grandpa "M"
 
Kristen0527 said...
Sept. 29, 2010 at 11:23 am
Ashley~ This Is an amazing piece! Your such an amazing writer!! After reading this i could picture everything you were going through and I felt like I was there! I love you!
 
Ashley2011 replied...
Sept. 29, 2010 at 2:55 pm
Thank you very much! I love you.
 
kath said...
Sept. 28, 2010 at 10:32 pm
Well done!  I wanted the story to keep going.  I am so glad that you were safe.
 
Ashley2011 replied...
Sept. 29, 2010 at 2:55 pm
I am glad I was safe, too! Fewf. Thank you for looking at my work! It is much appriciated.
 
Dee B. said...
Sept. 28, 2010 at 9:14 pm
Very nicely done!  I was ready to turn the page to hear the rest of the story....Keep up the good work!
 
Ashley2011 replied...
Sept. 29, 2010 at 2:56 pm
Thank you! I am working on some more work that maybe you will find interesting as well, and maybe not so open ended!
 
nheeley said...
Sept. 28, 2010 at 8:05 pm
What a great story.  The words you chose to articulate was incredible.  I felt like I was right in the car with you.  Very impressed with your righting Ashley.  Good job.
 
Ashley2011 replied...
Sept. 29, 2010 at 2:54 pm
Thank you so much for looking at my work.
 
Dad J said...
Sept. 28, 2010 at 3:05 pm
Excellent articulation of that night Ash, well written and I'm glad that it was not your fate that night!  Love you!
 
Ashley2011 replied...
Sept. 28, 2010 at 4:50 pm
Thank you Dad. I'm glad it was not my fate either! God took my life in his hands. I love you.
 
Grandma "M" said...
Sept. 28, 2010 at 12:45 pm
Great story Ashley!  You definately have a talent for writing.  Keep Up the good work.   Love You
 
Ashley2011 replied...
Sept. 28, 2010 at 4:47 pm
Thank you for taking the time to looking at my work! I love you too!
 
Nancy said...
Sept. 28, 2010 at 12:08 pm
Wow ! What a nail biter !  I hope this is fiction.  Great story !
 
Ashley2011 replied...
Sept. 28, 2010 at 4:48 pm
Thank you! I really appriciate it!
 
carol said...
Sept. 28, 2010 at 11:19 am
It was written very well, definitely got my full attention and I think the author has been gifted with a natural talent to write!!
 
Ashley2011 replied...
Sept. 28, 2010 at 4:49 pm
Thank you so much! I will be posting more of my work soon, I hope you will take the time to look at that as well!
 
grammasandie said...
Sept. 27, 2010 at 11:19 pm

It left me sitting on the edge of my seat!  What happened afterward ....

what's "the END of the story"????

 
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