Friend No More

February 4, 2013
By redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"


Hey, I thought that you used to be my friend
There was a time that you were so sweet to me
But that changed after I started dating
You made him out to be your enemy

You told me that he was all wrong for me
And when I didn’t listen, you got mean
You tried to make fun and put him down
But we all could plainly see your jealousy

Hey, I thought that you used to be my friend
I kept saying that the comments had to stop
But then you turned and slurred at me
And started to throw darts at my heart

One day the snide remarks went too far
My boyfriend and I finally got an apology
You had tried in vain to boost your ego
Instead it showed your immaturity and insecurity

Hey, I thought that you used to be my friend
But toxic friendships are meant to end
We both need time for our hearts to mend
So goodbye, my ex-best friend


The author's comments:
This is a poem about a real situation that a went through. One of my guy friends got really jealous when I started to date another guy. He tried to pick fights with him. My boyfriend and I tried to ignore his behavior because we thought it would subside, but it didn't. He even stopped being nice to me and called me really hurtful things. I told him off and have kept my distance from him ever since.

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mplo said...
on Sep. 4 2015 at 1:36 pm
I don't think that the rhythm really matters. In fact, the difference(s) in rhythm that're in this poem are what help make it really interesting to read.

mplo said...
on Sep. 4 2015 at 1:35 pm
What a great poem! The last stanza was especially great, because it was the most intense...and the most telling.

mplo said...
on Sep. 4 2015 at 1:27 pm
This is an excellent poem/story, especially the last paragraph, which is the most telling of all. The friend who put you down when you got a boyfriend and began dating wasn't a friend at all, obviously. Your "best friend" revealed her true self at an opportune moment. You're well rid of her, for she was never a friend, after all. Here's wishing you the best of luck in dating your boyfriend, and in finding a new best friend who won't try to undermine you out of spite and jealousy.

on Apr. 29 2013 at 9:10 am
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

Ah, yes. The rhythm WAS a bit hard to follow.

on Apr. 29 2013 at 9:09 am
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
72 articles 0 photos 860 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

I am in LOVE with the last stanza. Way to tie everything up! My lone suggestion is that maybe at the beginning, when you say you started dating, you could put a little metaphor there or something... such as, I don't know... "But that changed after I fell in love." But something not so cheesy. (: Really good job though!!

on Mar. 5 2013 at 12:51 am
This is really good! Totally relatable - I went through a similar situation. Keep it up girlie!

on Feb. 27 2013 at 1:15 am
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

I tried to make it as blunt and concise as possible. Maybe I should have spent more time on it.

on Feb. 27 2013 at 1:14 am
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

Thank you - I like your work too!

on Feb. 27 2013 at 1:13 am
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

Aww thanks!

on Feb. 27 2013 at 1:13 am
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

Thank you - you too!

on Feb. 25 2013 at 1:01 pm
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

Thank you!

on Feb. 25 2013 at 1:00 pm
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

Thank you!

on Feb. 24 2013 at 12:35 pm
Sparkle1pops PLATINUM, Colorado Springs, Colorado
31 articles 20 photos 343 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No great artist ever sees things as they really are. If he did, he would cease to be an artist."
- Oscar Wilde

Oh thank you I apreaciate your looking at it!

on Feb. 24 2013 at 9:11 am
WistfulThinking PLATINUM, Kiln, Mississippi
21 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
'Behind him, across vast distances of space and time, from the place he had left, he thought he heard music too. But perhaps it was only an echo.'- The Giver by Lois Lowry

Thank you!

writer101 said...
on Feb. 23 2013 at 11:06 pm
oh i can relate to this so much! seems like a song almost...

on Feb. 23 2013 at 11:03 pm
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

Thanks! And I like your work too!

on Feb. 23 2013 at 11:01 pm
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

Thank you for the honest criticism and review. I guess I was more focused on just telling the story clearly and didn't put a lot of fancy touches on it.

on Feb. 23 2013 at 10:58 pm
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

Thank you so much!

on Feb. 23 2013 at 8:18 pm
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

Thank You so much! Your work is really good too.

on Feb. 23 2013 at 6:01 pm
WistfulThinking PLATINUM, Kiln, Mississippi
21 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
'Behind him, across vast distances of space and time, from the place he had left, he thought he heard music too. But perhaps it was only an echo.'- The Giver by Lois Lowry

This was really well written. I am totally suprised how much I can relate to this. Keep up the good work!




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