First Kiss

September 5, 2009
By , Boston, MA
“Come closer” he says. I walk across the front porch moving lingeringly threw the summer night air. I stop to breathe it in. It fills me with an energy that crackles through my body jump-starting my heart. It beats loudly. I feel it in me as it throws itself against my chest. I feel its swelling pulse in my wrists and fingertips. I feel it in the bottom of my stomach.
I lean against the railing facing him but I can’t look at him.
“Closer.” His voice is deep and hoarse. I feel him scrutinizing me. He slides two fingers into a belt loop on either side of my hips and pulls me to him. I laugh and finally look up. He was smiling broadly down at me. He continues staring. Not wanting to be the first to look away but finding the tension unbearable i cannot help but to look down yet again. He unclasps a hand from behind my waist and lifts it to my face. As he did so it shook.

“I guess I’m more nervous than I thought I’d be” he says in that same low voice. He tilts my face towards his. His stare remains unbroken but the smile has vanished and a new intensity has overwhelmed his face. Then slowly, he kisses me.

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Megi24 said...
Apr. 27, 2011 at 3:16 pm
This is awesome! It very accuratly depicts the tension and suspense from a first kiss. The only thing i may suggest is changing it so that the tenses are the same. Keep writing!
wonderlandhaley said...
Mar. 28, 2011 at 3:51 pm

Cutest Story Ever! If you like this comment, you'll continue! 

{Fingers Crossed}

poemgirl. said...
Mar. 14, 2011 at 5:47 am
wow..amazing nice job.
Volleystar15 said...
Jan. 29, 2011 at 3:03 pm
its so weird that my first kiss was almost like that!!
LinaTroli said...
Jan. 7, 2011 at 7:20 pm

gosh, if my first kiss was like that...

lol i didnt have an amazing first kiss, but thats a great story!

TheContentedWanderer94 said...
Jan. 7, 2011 at 2:55 pm
So sweet! :D Keep writing! I loved the imagery!
MangaArtist said...
Dec. 16, 2010 at 9:44 pm
wow this is just beautiful! great imagery and stellar emotion!
ShannonVictoria said...
Dec. 16, 2010 at 4:48 pm
Awh! :) I wish my first kiss happened sorta like that. :)
ShankssYuLater said...
Nov. 24, 2010 at 7:19 pm
Nice! I wish my first kiss was like this. Instead, it was with some slime ball that lied behind my back, and broke my heart. But good job!
Peace.Love.Music. replied...
Jan. 7, 2011 at 7:37 pm

I feel yah (:


russianreader replied...
Jun. 10, 2011 at 3:43 pm
iswim said...
Nov. 24, 2010 at 2:38 pm
Awww this is so cute! i hope my first kiss is like this(:
believeinmexoxo said...
Nov. 2, 2010 at 10:59 pm
i hope my first kiss is with a sweet boy like that! good job on this, by the way :)
FunFace said...
Nov. 2, 2010 at 3:34 pm

aww this is so cute i love how he is nervouse as well.  i think that you could cut some of the "i" s  but its really good.


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steph95 said...
Nov. 2, 2010 at 8:54 am
very simple detailed and cute!! nice !! can u please check my work ...
amlee1212 said...
Oct. 11, 2010 at 11:41 am
This article has great detail of the kiss. It is pure magic. Excellent imagery. I am just in awe at this piece.
bltsoccerchick said...
Aug. 28, 2010 at 7:30 pm
I can only hope my first kiss is that sweet. :) Very well written. Great detail :)
Carolyn Jo S. said...
Jun. 23, 2010 at 9:55 pm
Aww i love it... kinda wish my first kiss was like that. that is so romantic... very good :)
DifferentTeen replied...
Aug. 6, 2010 at 7:00 am
Yeah my first kiss was kind of wack, I've always wanted the slow, romantic, movie scene kind of kiss but oh well. Nice job!
So_what_Im_not_perfect replied...
Aug. 6, 2010 at 8:44 pm
my first kiss was crazy! i was horrible lol
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