A Teenage Love Story

July 26, 2009
By JustMe212 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
JustMe212 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
If you want to look young and Beautiful, stand next to ugly old people.
(love this, hilarious :)


It was a warm June night, the sun just a glimpse above the horizon, with a slight breeze, brushing lightly against my skin. I could feel my dark brown hair flowing with the direction of the wind as i went round and round on the carousel. I closed my eyes and listened to the soft carnival music in the background of people talking and laughing. Even with my eyes closed, I could still see the joyful faces of children, their eyes wide with excitement, their parents watching them carefully and happily. I smiled, capturing the moment. I made sure to mentally write down all the details in my head, so I could retell it exactly . Its been nearly a week since I last seen them and would be another month or two until I would see them again, although before leaving they made me promise to call them when ever I wanted bit at least, once a week. Their 20th anniversary was last week, so as my gift, I decided to go stay with my aunt in California for the summer. As my mind drifted to my home back in New Jersey, I felt the carousel slowly come to a stop. I gently opened my eyes and let out a happy sigh. Aia laughed as I struggled to get off my carousel horse. Feeling dizzy, I went to find a place to sit. As I sat down on a nearby bench, my eyes swept the carnival for a corndog stand. Spotting one, I started walking towards it. Halfway there, knowing I was supposed to call my aunt at 9:30, I decided to see what time it was. I looked down in my bag and began searching for my phone. Suddenly, I ran into someone. “Sorr-“, I looked up unexpectedly into the striking blue eyes of a drop dead gorgeous stranger. He looked about my age, if not a year older and was an inch taller than me. No words could even begin to describe him.
My heart pounding, I tried to catch my breath. Just when I thought he couldn’t get any more hotter,Gorgeous Stranger smiled, making his eyes twinkle and my conclusion rip into shreds. Finally catching my breath again, I tried to speak again. “Sorry, I wasn’t watching where I was going,..I….My…..Sorry” I stuttered. He laughed, and then smiled again. “Don’t be”, he said. Even the sound of his voice made my heart explode. He held out his hand. “I’m Jonah, by the way “I held out my hand, meeting his. My hand tingled. “Skyler’ I said back, matching his smile.

The author's comments:
This is part of a book im writing, which is a work in progress lol If you want more just comment asking for more and ill email it to you :) tTell me what you think :)

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on Sep. 7 2017 at 10:06 am
feeling.clueless, Greensboro, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
dont have one i love ALL OF THEM hellooo my name is Catherine but you can call me cat or Cathy im in high school and i want to become a forensic pathologist, i lovvvveeeeee quotes so hey if you got a good quote hit me up at catherinerodriguez382 at gmail
-Its okay to be a glow stick but sometimes we need to break before we shine
-C'est la vie
-you cant start the next chapter of your life if you keep re-reading the last one
-do not judge my story by the chapter you walked in on
-you cant buy happiness but you can buy ice cream and that's pretty much the same thing
-be careful with your words they can be forgiven but not forgotten

hey i love the book its pls reply to this message or post whatever it is i have a question for u

irishlass317 said...
on Aug. 21 2012 at 9:00 pm
irishlass317, Jefferson City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"I asked Jesus 'How much do you love me?' He answered 'This much.' And He streched out His arms and died."

This is so cute!! :)

GummyWorms5 said...
on Jul. 11 2012 at 12:28 am
i want more of this story :D

on Jun. 16 2012 at 6:41 pm
2014Nation GOLD, Alma, Georgia
10 articles 1 photo 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never in the world does hatred cease by hatred; hatred ceases by love. - Buddha

Omg! I loved this! Please tell me when you are done with the book. Are you going to post it here?

on Jun. 5 2012 at 9:57 pm
Shortty1314 GOLD, Fox Lake, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"What, do you really think I was
strong enough to handle it?
If you did, then sweetie, you
don't know me at all.
These "smiles" are fake.
Just another lie people bought.
You will never know the disaster
that's behind them." -Anonymous

i want more (: i absolutely love it !! (:

on May. 25 2012 at 3:17 pm
Syncopation BRONZE, Mt. Vernon, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
But what is liberty without wisdom, and without virtue? It is the greatest of all possible evils; for it is folly, vice, and madness, without tuition or restraint. --Burke

I really loved the story, and the only thing I think could or should be changed is the punctuation. It's a bit sketchy and hard to understand, and I think it'd be an overall better read if you would correct it and maybe break it up into paragraphs. Overall, it was great!

on Apr. 25 2012 at 11:10 am
ashley112027 BRONZE, Grand Rapids, Michigan
1 article 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All you need is 20 seconds of insane courage. Just literally 20 seconds of embarrassing bravery, and I promise you, something great will come out of it."

Made my heart pound....!

 


on Mar. 3 2012 at 4:33 pm
writinggirl198 BRONZE, Crawfordville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
act crazy, party like hell, and have a good time on this wild ride!!!!!!

omg if you could send me updates past  teen love story 4 that would be freaking awesome i really hope you can make that into a book :)

on Feb. 5 2012 at 7:19 pm
troubled-times GOLD, Richmond, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Talents include talking about the X-Files and picking up dogs."

Well, the author said that it's part of a longer book she's written, so it's not just a short fiction in and of itself. Maybe that's why the ending seems abrupt?

on Feb. 5 2012 at 7:02 pm
Bookworm1997 BRONZE, South Milwaukee, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
You cannot open a book without learning something. -Confucious

Not bad, but I always feel like a short piece has to be really touching and awesome if it's short, and this fell short.

gokartgirl14 said...
on Jan. 12 2012 at 4:23 pm
gokartgirl14, Cresco, Iowa
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This was a good story but it was short. I think you should have added more to the end of it.

on Dec. 1 2011 at 2:36 pm
Goddess PLATINUM, Connellsville, Pennsylvania
27 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Dream as if you'll live forever, live as if you'll die today.”

That was a beautiful piece. i loved it!!

on Nov. 29 2011 at 11:12 am
MarissaWhitecloud SILVER, Oskaloosa, Iowa
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This was short but I loved it!

on Nov. 9 2011 at 9:16 pm
Cloudyday92 BRONZE, Merced, California
3 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
The quietest people have the loudest minds.

This made me want to ride on a carousel :D

on Nov. 9 2011 at 8:24 pm
NKsunshine BRONZE, Palatine, Illinois
1 article 0 photos 77 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I don't need easy, I just need possible!" ~Bethany Hamilton

This is sooooooooo good<3

gnehoewrui said...
on Oct. 18 2011 at 4:58 pm
ur so dum!!!!!!!!!!

on Sep. 26 2011 at 4:17 pm
I want more!!!! I love that so much! Please email me the rest!!!

on Jul. 26 2011 at 5:35 pm
Slugger20 BRONZE, Lindale, Texas
1 article 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you can look up, you can get up -anonomys

agreed... please email me the rest :)

on Jul. 22 2011 at 11:08 pm
Jessi Chan BRONZE, New York, New York
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments
what a wonderful piece! the ending was beautiful. if you have a chance, check my piece out! thanks! 

eMiLyP GOLD said...
on Jul. 20 2011 at 9:42 am
eMiLyP GOLD, Jeannette, Pennsylvania
13 articles 6 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is short; speak your mind, say what ya wanna say, and do what ya wanna do (as long as you don't get caught!).

This was awesome! I kinda liked how it just ended like that. I do that all the time and it adds suspense. Keep writing!!! I want more! : )


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