A Tale Of Two Maids

November 25, 2009
By Freewut BRONZE, Springfield, Missouri
Freewut BRONZE, Springfield, Missouri
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Once upon a time a young, orphaned woman was enslaved by her evil step-mother and step-sisters. She cheerfully began everyday by waking up in a bed of straw with a golden nimbus around her and a halo above her head. Singing a song with her mice and bird friends, she garbed herself in a drab, black servant gown. As Cinderella glided downstairs to prepare breakfast, her step-family was rising from their feathered beds.

Cruella and DeVil awakened that morning with evil smirks on their faces and gave their daily prayer to God. “Please,” they intoned piously, “give us the strength to torture Cinderella. Amen.” After this duty was finished, the two sisters scanned their large, messy closet and chose matching sunflower-yellow dresses with little bees flittering about on them. Then a knock came at the door and a smiling Cinderella bustled in with an over laden tray of divine food. Once she was through praying to Lucifer for patience with her family, she set the tray on a table and turned to leave. Suddenly, Cruella screamed as a fat mouse raced off her plate of eggs and bacon.

As punishment for her terrible preparation of breakfast, Cinderella had to clean the floors of the three-story house with her toothbrush, and then she had to use it. During this cruel chore, the postman came to deliver an engraved invitation to the handsome Prince’s ball. After affirming that she could go to the ball, Cinderella was so excited and hurried to finish all of her time consuming tasks. When she was done, it was ten minutes before the main event, and she had nothing to wear but a dirty, tattered working gown. However, her mice buddies had made her an angel-like pink dress. They also mentioned that God sent two turtle doves with a message wondering when she’d finish her vacation in hell. After putting on the dress, Cinderella raced downstairs to catch her leaving family. Cruella and DeVil were amazed by Cinderella’s keen fashion sense and even complimented her on the flattering color. Nonetheless, the sisters were not going to let their Prince be taken by a fashionably dressed maid. Therefore, they threw Cinderella into an alligator pit.

The hungry alligators promptly began devouring Cinderella’s dress. Eventually, the barely scratched Cinderella was completely naked, and the mean sisters were satisfied that she couldn’t go to the ball. Once they left, Cinderella charmed the voracious alligators into not eating her with a song. All of a sudden, a wand shaped pipe fell into the pit where the sweet young woman was petting the now friendly reptiles. With unexpected insight, she began to sharpen the pipe against a sharp rock jutting out of the swampy pit. Then, against her normally good nature, Cinderella proceeded to stab five brave alligators willing to die for her kind nature and important cause. After the gruesome deaths, Cinderella skinned the alligators to make an edgy leather outfit.

Catching a wagon ride with a lecherous old man, Cinderella arrived at the ball ready to show all of the silly fashion faux pas what a real woman wore to attract a Prince. Cruella and DeVil were stunned to see Cinderella and her amazingly raw outfit. They quickly tried to hide their own out-of-date dresses behind large drapes. Meanwhile, the bored Prince couldn’t believe the audacity and sheer coolness of this new girl and asked her to marry him.

The next day, bells rang throughout the country for the royal wedding. The bride wore her special alligator outfit, and as a surprise, Charming wore mouse fur from Cinderella’s very own home. It was her wedding gift to him. Cruella and DeVil were banned from the wedding and forced into slavery in China while Cinderella and Prince Charming lived happily ever after.


The author's comments:
This was a satirical essay for school.

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on Oct. 23 2013 at 10:17 am
Demoderby PLATINUM, Pontiac, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
All that we see or dream is but a dream within a dream
-Edgar Allen Poe

ok I read that story and I LOVED IT!!!! It was the BEST story... Well one of the best; It was the best Snow White story Ive ever read... :D Good job! Check out one of my stories n poems some time, I'd like people to see my stuff and whatnot.

on Oct. 23 2013 at 9:50 am
Demoderby PLATINUM, Pontiac, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
All that we see or dream is but a dream within a dream
-Edgar Allen Poe

But the story was still the best one I've heard in a wile. I like how the killed and used the animal skin for her dress. Was there a trail of blood from the animal skin? because freshly killed and skined animals have alot of blood coming out -of course!- and the blood would still be warm... ... ^-^ Just saying... ... ...

on Oct. 23 2013 at 9:43 am
Demoderby PLATINUM, Pontiac, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
All that we see or dream is but a dream within a dream
-Edgar Allen Poe

Funny, I liked it... But hte one thing that gets me is the 2 names; Cruella and Devil, That isnt two names, thats one name and its from the move 101 dolmations. Every story I hear the sisters names are changed. But you still did a good job with the story! :D

on Aug. 27 2012 at 6:55 pm
RandiRose SILVER, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
You must be the change you wish to see in the world.

LOL!!!!! TOO FUNNY!!!!

on Aug. 27 2012 at 6:52 pm
RandiRose SILVER, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
You must be the change you wish to see in the world.

Check out my version on Snow White in "Skylar West and the Seven Runaways"

on Dec. 29 2011 at 11:54 pm
writers_revenge BRONZE, Newport News, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
I think that I'm so psychotic and so mentally ill that if I could tap into that I could do something really interesting.
Megan Fox

Lol you made the best version of cinderella ever!!!

theavatar said...
on Apr. 10 2011 at 6:45 pm
no prob :) could u plz take a look at my story? its called the diary of hades and is based off of the percy jackson series. let me know when u write more, id love to read it!

Freewut BRONZE said...
on Apr. 9 2011 at 10:01 pm
Freewut BRONZE, Springfield, Missouri
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Thanks!! It was really fun to write! :)

theavatar said...
on Apr. 9 2011 at 5:49 pm
best version of cinderella yet :D loved it!

on Feb. 6 2011 at 6:20 pm
RiverSong BRONZE, Baltimore, Maryland
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LOVE IT!!!!!!!

I try to write satire all the time but it never works... at least there are some people with enormous talent for it :D

My favorite part is this: "Cruella and DeVil were stunned to see Cinderella and her amazingly raw outfit."  LOL!!!!


stargrl SILVER said...
on Feb. 2 2011 at 2:02 pm
stargrl SILVER, Ballston Lake, New York
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hilarious... the end part seemed like the play/movie Thouroughly Modern Millie ;) LOVED THIS!!!

Freewut BRONZE said...
on Jan. 7 2011 at 8:11 pm
Freewut BRONZE, Springfield, Missouri
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Thanks! I'm glad you liked it...  :D

on Jan. 7 2011 at 10:34 am
MysteryHeart GOLD, Thorold, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Usted es especial! AKWARD!!! (in an opera like voice), ohhh fasha', what the huh?,who in the name of what?, sanity now!

I COULDNT STOP LAUGHING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

That brightened my day


Freewut BRONZE said...
on Nov. 24 2010 at 9:05 pm
Freewut BRONZE, Springfield, Missouri
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haha thanks

on Nov. 24 2010 at 5:50 pm
sabina22 BRONZE, Glen Mills, Pennsylvania
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Hahaha I LOVED this, it made my day it was so hilarious xD

Rachie_P. GOLD said...
on Dec. 21 2009 at 9:17 pm
Rachie_P. GOLD, Virginia Beach, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
don't spend your life hiding from the monsters under your bed> go out and enjoy life to the fullest

that was hilarious


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