Shattered Water

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Often I look to the water
And I do not see my reflection anymore,
The surface ripples in the breeze
Allowing me to know something’s underneath,

Even when distorted
I see him daring me to take the forfeit,
I continue to search
For what it submerged,

But all I see is him. Blue eyes
Staring at me, tempting me to break,
The pain is bundled inside of me
Like the dark secrets of this lake,

The moments I shared with him
Start to seep out the cracks,
Trickling out of my eye
Like a rusty leaking tap,

A leaf stirs the water
And I cannot see his eyes anymore,
My frustration rattles like a breeze
Until my true despair scuttles back underneath.





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Bubbs This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 10, 2013 at 7:34 am
Thanks! I'm working on my rhyming skills seen as most of my previous poems don't rhyme. :) xx
 
jetta.ckThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 9, 2013 at 2:09 pm
I love the imagery adn the word "scuttles". Great word choice. Your rhyming in the first stanza seems the tiny bit forced, but I don't think it's something you need to worry about, considering this poem is straight from your heart. Grat job.
 
WaffleOcean2934 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 5, 2013 at 5:21 pm
I love poems about water.  I also really like the imagery.  Nice work on it!
 
Bubbs This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 6, 2013 at 2:18 am
Thanks!! :)
 
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