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Often I look to the water
And I do not see my reflection anymore,
The surface ripples in the breeze
Allowing me to know something’s underneath,

Even when distorted
I see him daring me to take the forfeit,
I continue to search
For what it submerged,

But all I see is him. Blue eyes
Staring at me, tempting me to break,
The pain is bundled inside of me
Like the dark secrets of this lake,

The moments I shared with him
Start to seep out the cracks,
Trickling out of my eye
Like a rusty leaking tap,

A leaf stirs the water
And I cannot see his eyes anymore,
My frustration rattles like a breeze
Until my true despair scuttles back underneath.



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Bubbs This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 10, 2013 at 7:34 am
Thanks! I'm working on my rhyming skills seen as most of my previous poems don't rhyme. :) xx
 
jetta.ckThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 9, 2013 at 2:09 pm
I love the imagery adn the word "scuttles". Great word choice. Your rhyming in the first stanza seems the tiny bit forced, but I don't think it's something you need to worry about, considering this poem is straight from your heart. Grat job.
 
WaffleOcean2934This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 5, 2013 at 5:21 pm
I love poems about water.  I also really like the imagery.  Nice work on it!
 
Bubbs This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 6, 2013 at 2:18 am
Thanks!! :)
 
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