Heaven MAG

October 1, 2012
By baaaaaaaaaab BRONZE, Clemmons, North Carolina
baaaaaaaaaab BRONZE, Clemmons, North Carolina
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Welcome to the place you thought you knew,
But don’t feel bad, we all did too.
Welcome to the place you’ve never seen,
Where you won’t know hate, you won’t know mean.
Welcome to the place you’ve dreamed about,
Because maybe they weren’t so far out.
Welcome to the place with no more shame,
No more cringing at your name.
Welcome to the place that was your hope,
Where you won’t need tears or ways to cope.
Welcome to the place where walls fall down,
Where you won’t look out the window and frown.
Welcome to the place with no more war.
Welcome home forevermore.



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on Dec. 11 2015 at 11:42 pm
Katyaini SILVER, Greater Noida, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Life is like a chocolate covered chilly....

Some succeed because they're destined to;
Most succeed because they're determined too

This piece has a true flow to it, once you understand what it's talking of... lov'd it!

on Nov. 13 2015 at 7:25 pm
Clary_Fray PLATINUM, Castro Valley, California
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Favorite Quote:
"You were made to, go out and get her
the minute, you let her under your skin
then you begin to make it better
anytime you feel the pain, hey Jude, refrain
don’t carry the world upon your shoulders..."

I think choppiness provides for the personality of a poem and that if your flow isn't perfect it's ok. Great poem! I love.

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on Dec. 28 2013 at 8:55 pm
PixiePoet GOLD, Woodbine, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"We must not lose this sense of possibility because in the end, it's all we have." - Marina Keegan

I like the poem, but sometimes rhyming can get in the way of the rhythm and structure . .  hopeefully that makes sense.  But I do like the last two lines, especially, "Welcome home forevermore."


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