My true inspiration

August 18, 2011
By Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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Sometimes I glance at the moon,
I wave at the stars.
I wonder who inspired God,
To make them, who they are.






At times, I read about the brave soldiers,
And the cruel wars they fought in.
I wonder who inspired them,
to search for the light within?




I am clumsy sir,
And at times extremely stubborn.
I suppose you showed me that,
Or perhaps my past downturn?

I use to search for the negative,
While you taught me the positive.
Maybe because I was scared,
Scared of becoming a captive.

A captive of what?
You may sincerely ask.
A captive of your inspiration,
To take on whichever task.

I have left you, my dear sir
With nothing, I must sadly say.
But you have left me with a memory
That is in my heart, to forever stay.

That memory is the inner strength,
You have helped me reached.
The memory of never failing,
No matter how low my life has seemed.

For you said, "I am a child of God
And a part of His huge creation."
So for that lesson, Mr. Attine,
You shall always be my true inspiration.


The author's comments:
This poem was actually written to my teacher Mr. Attine, before I left my old school, that I attended since 3rd grade and this teacher truly helped me through my highs and lows. I love you Mr. Attine.

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on May. 26 2012 at 6:35 pm
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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ohhh haha gotcha ! thanks :)

on May. 26 2012 at 6:32 pm
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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 i meant *reader

on May. 26 2012 at 6:31 pm
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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because i wanted to explain to the ready what for me is inspiration. inspiration can mean many different things to people. so i felt that a short intro of what it is in my perspective would be a good idea to get th reader to understand where i was coming from.

on Apr. 12 2012 at 5:42 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

I like how you ended it, it was actually really unexpected to me the way that I read/understood it or how you wrote it, I'm not sure. The first two stanzas didn't really seem relevant to the rest of the poem. I couldn't understand why you put them in. I get the conecction, but they don't seem neccesary.

on Apr. 9 2012 at 4:39 pm
AlaskaFrost GOLD, Acushnet, Massachusetts
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Another great poem! I love this one because it's simple, and this simplicity allows it to truly show how Mr. Attine was a role model - how you looked up to him with child-like wonder and awe. I don't mean that the poem is itself "childish;" for me, at least, whenever I'm inspired by someone I get that child-like curiosity and wonder. But ANYWAY, it was truly a pleasure reading this poem :)

on Sep. 8 2011 at 4:53 pm
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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aww thank you :)

ams98 said...
on Sep. 2 2011 at 10:35 am
ams98, Brighton, Michigan
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This one is by FAR my favorite of yours...its simple but the meaning makes me smile:)

I LOVE the part that says

Sometimes I glance at the moon,
I wave at the stars.
I wonder who inspired God,
To make them, who they are.


on Aug. 24 2011 at 10:17 pm
snaomi PLATINUM, Cheshire, Connecticut
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I really like the first stanza because of the original idea that someone could inspire God to create.  It's just fascinating.  I feel that there are times, though, that the rhyme scheme of the poem creates a certain amount of awkwardness - like with "a captive of what/you may sincerely ask".  this line just feels a little forced.  Maybe take another look at each line individually and see if it's really saying what you want it to say.  The poem was clearly inspired by a wonderful person and comes from the heart.

on Aug. 24 2011 at 6:41 pm
RFrocker23 PLATINUM, Ballwin, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened."

This is very good. Just some picky stuff: reached should be reach and in the line "That is in my heart, to forever stay" I'd suggest taking out the forever to add a little more rhythm.

on Aug. 24 2011 at 4:52 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
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Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

i really like this poem, my favourite verse is the first one because i like the way it rhymes! i think it's writtenj really well, and i think it's great the way you liked your teacher so much!  

on Aug. 23 2011 at 9:37 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

no, i was talking about the second line of the second to last stanza! it says you have helped me reached. that doesn't make sense, i think you mean either you have helped me reach or you have helped be reached. the grammars a little off there. i was just pointing that out to you because you most likely overlooked that. :)

on Aug. 23 2011 at 5:05 pm
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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lol what i ment by "with nothing, i muslt sadly say" is because i had to leave my school out of nowhere so i dint get to say bye to him or give him a hug or anything. so thats what i ment with nothing. but thank you!

on Aug. 22 2011 at 10:55 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

i like how you loosely rhymed things in a not-so-pushy way! :) it made things flow nicely and i love the first stanza the most. i must say just to let youknow that thte second line of the second to last stanza is a bit messed up. you did a wonderful job of putting thoughts into my the reader's0 head! good job. i'm sure your teacher loved reading it!

on Aug. 22 2011 at 10:41 pm
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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good im glad :)

on Aug. 21 2011 at 9:48 pm
BetweenWorks SILVER, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
The meaning of life is a question that you have already answered.

Great Job! This poem really got me thinking about what inspires all of us.

on Aug. 20 2011 at 12:11 am
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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thank you!

on Aug. 19 2011 at 11:10 pm
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

Hah. Great thoughts in the opening stanzas, and ending in rhyme was a good moce. 


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