A map to darkness

August 17, 2011
By Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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I looked at a map
For a specific direction,
To a boy's heart, But I
Stopped at the wrong station.

Now I am lost, and
all alone in the dark.
In a twisted station.
In the the shape of an arc.

And in this station,
Are my two biggest fears:
Depression and Solitude
That I have escaped from for years.

I scream and cry,
As I see solitude walk about.
And I notice my lips moving
But my voice wont come out.

I quickly grow cold and fearful.
And look all around.
For I have lost all hope.
And know that I shall never be found.

Then I suddenly feel
My heart become gloomy.
Tears roll down my face,
Depression, has now joined me.

I am now a prisoner,
In the cave of a boy's dark heart.
All because of a map
That I have now, tore apart.


The author's comments:
This piece is about me falling in love with the wrong person. And it speaks about how I am a prisoner in his heart because of a mysterious map that led me to it. The map symbolizes my feelings.

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on Nov. 12 2012 at 7:34 pm
PandaBearLouise16 BRONZE, Lyndonville, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
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I love lamp.....
IM KICKIN MY @$$ DOYA MIND???????????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

wow excellent! 5 star for sure!

on Apr. 10 2012 at 8:59 pm
gb12197 PLATINUM, Bridgeport, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"next time you feel like a failure, think about how you are alive, and you have the opportunity to be successful."

"i don't have an attitude, i have a personality you can't handle"

"i am weird"

this is a great poem i love the concept, the emotion, and the ability it has to conect with the readers feelings. i can really relate to this, so it makes me love it even more. you are a great poet, and i can't wait to read some of your other stuff.

 


on Sep. 8 2011 at 4:51 pm
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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omg yes exactly my concept! you speak my language ;)

Julianasmom said...
on Aug. 28 2011 at 3:48 pm
Dear author I loved your poem very cohesive , it was well written. Furthermore you were able to transcend your emotional state through your illuminating choice of words. Keep up the good work you are well on your way to becoming a legend of a poet!!

on Aug. 28 2011 at 12:28 pm
billlover420 GOLD, Justin, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Boy, when you're dead, they really fix you up. I hope to hell when I do die somebody has sense enough to just dump me in the river or something. Anything except sticking me in a goddam cemetery.  People coming and putting a bunch of flowers on your stomach on Sunday, and all that crap. Who wants flowers when you're dead? Nobody. ~J.D. Salinger,The Catcher in the Rye,

this is very very good XD i like how u didnt just do the typical falling in love u showed how bad it hurts wen u fall for the wrong person but u can't get out of the mess that ur in with them and you try hard to escape but it never worrks and we fall flat

on Aug. 22 2011 at 10:57 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

what a great concept! i like the map thing! very creative! this was very nice! great!

on Aug. 20 2011 at 12:13 am
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
16 articles 0 photos 98 comments
lmao :) thank you !

on Aug. 19 2011 at 6:11 pm
hworld123 SILVER, Boston, Massachusetts
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I thought that this was very good! I particularly like your third stanza--the beat was perfect, and the rhyming seemed smooth and effortless. I also like your punctuation in all stanzas except for the fifth... too many periods (although it DOES work for you in the sense that I feel almost constricted reading that stanza). Great job!

on Aug. 18 2011 at 10:08 pm
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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awwww thank you so much ! and of course !

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on Aug. 18 2011 at 9:56 pm
mclayne SILVER, Barrington, Illinois
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This poem really touched my heart and I can't explain it but it made me feel so free yet imprisoned as well. I can't explain it, but you are amazing at poetry and this is one of the most incredible poems I have ever read (if you don't mind could you read my poem Goodbye and give me some feedback on it as well because I would love to hear the opinion of someone as talented as you)




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