August 4, 2010
By , provo, UT
you stole my heart,
you stole my soul,
you stole all of my self control,
everything that makes me. me,
is now all yours for eternity,
i'm all yours forever and always,
its like running through endless hallways,
i just keep going not knowing what i will find,
you being you so sweet and so kind,
will help me find my way in this endless maze,
so we can be together are love will blaze.

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SnickerLover said...
Aug. 29, 2010 at 8:51 pm
this is a very nice poem!
cupcake queen said...
Aug. 29, 2010 at 5:35 pm
I really liked that I can relate to such an experiance 
Blackbirdfly. said...
Aug. 29, 2010 at 2:03 pm

I enjoyed the poem significantly, and felt I could relate to the unforgettable feelings of giving yourself over fully to  a person.

Good luck!

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Kingfan123 said...
Aug. 29, 2010 at 9:58 am
It was really great! I loved how it rythmed really well! Keep writing! Very good! :-)
Phantom_Girl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 28, 2010 at 3:30 pm
It's a good theme, but many of the rhymes sound forced. It also sounds a little cliched. But that's just my personal opinion.
DancerBabe said...
Aug. 28, 2010 at 3:23 pm
That was good, it just kinda rolls of the tongue!
BaLd4EvEr said...
Aug. 28, 2010 at 12:05 am
it was good and i liked how it rhymed but you didnt go out of your way to make it rhyme, the rhymes just kinda fell into place, check out some of my stuff! :)
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