austin

August 4, 2010
By Anonymous

you stole my heart,
you stole my soul,
you stole all of my self control,
everything that makes me. me,
is now all yours for eternity,
i'm all yours forever and always,
its like running through endless hallways,
i just keep going not knowing what i will find,
you being you so sweet and so kind,
will help me find my way in this endless maze,
so we can be together are love will blaze.

The author's comments:
this was my first poem. i thought i was in love with the guy its about. i was wrong tho.

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on Aug. 29 2010 at 8:51 pm
silence-is-loud GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
FLOAT LIKE A BUTTERFLY, STING LIKE A BEE- MUHAMMID ALI

this is a very nice poem!

on Aug. 29 2010 at 5:35 pm
I really liked that I can relate to such an experiance 

on Aug. 29 2010 at 2:03 pm
Blackbirdfly. BRONZE, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Reality leaves a lot to the imagination."
-John Lennon

I enjoyed the poem significantly, and felt I could relate to the unforgettable feelings of giving yourself over fully to  a person.

Good luck!

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on Aug. 29 2010 at 9:58 am
Kingfan123 GOLD, Charles Town, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Life moves pretty fast, if you don't stop to look around once in awhile, you could miss it."
and
"I'd rather stand alone for the right reasons than stand popular for the wrong."

It was really great! I loved how it rythmed really well! Keep writing! Very good! :-)

on Aug. 28 2010 at 3:30 pm
Phantom_Girl GOLD, Ft. Carson, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"If it comes out of the lion's mouth...it will be on the test."
-Mr. Bala

It's a good theme, but many of the rhymes sound forced. It also sounds a little cliched. But that's just my personal opinion.

on Aug. 28 2010 at 3:23 pm
DancerBabe SILVER, Tuscarawas, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams." -Eleanor Roosevelt
"Bad writers plagerize, good writers steal!"

That was good, it just kinda rolls of the tongue!

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on Aug. 28 2010 at 12:05 am
Mickee BRONZE, Yorktown Heights, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Erica Albright (Rooney Mara): "You are going to go through life thinking that girls don't like you because you're a nerd. And I want you to know from the bottom of my heart that that won't be true. It'll be because you're an asshole."

Mark Zuckerberg: "I think if your clients want to sit on my shoulders and call themselves tall, they have the right to give it a try, but there's no requirement that I enjoy sitting here listening to people lie. You have part of my attention - you have the minimum amount. The rest of my attention is back at the offices of Facebook, where my colleagues and I are doing things that no one in this room, including and especially your clients, are intellectually or creatively capable of doing. Did I adequately answer your condescending question?

"You're not the same as you were before, You were much more...muchier...you've lost your muchness."
I feel like I just found out my favorite love song was written about a sandwich.

it was good and i liked how it rhymed but you didnt go out of your way to make it rhyme, the rhymes just kinda fell into place, check out some of my stuff! :)


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