"Drunk"

November 9, 2009
By goaliemugz SILVER, Rockville, Maryland
goaliemugz SILVER, Rockville, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
Life is too short to be unhappy.


That night I wish he’d handed me the keys.
We just left from a magnificent bar.
The vodka and rum were his enemies.
At first he couldn’t even find his car.

I asked him, “are you sure you want to drive?”
He said, “no worries son, I am all good.”
Thinking to myself would we all survive?
That second we were friends with the wood.

Crawling around the car into the street.
My hands and face were drenched in all blood.
His head in the windshield, out of his seat.
He was unbuckled, his car full of mud.

Blaming myself for what happened that day,
Can’t bring back my father in any way.

The author's comments:
I wrote this piece after my grandma died. This Shakespearean sonnet consists of every line being 10 syllables.

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on May. 14 2010 at 9:09 am
Uhhhhh.....yeah., Yes, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
No.

This poem is very touching. Im still new to the whole poem thing but this is a great poem.

on Apr. 22 2010 at 12:27 am
CreativeScript PLATINUM, Port Hardy, Other
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I just finished writing my story called "Driving Drunk" it's not up yet. But you should all check out my stuff. Rate, Comment! Ill look at your stuff.

trblue GOLD said...
on Mar. 27 2010 at 11:56 am
trblue GOLD, Richmond, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Too often we lose sight of life's simple pleasures. Remember, when someone annoys you, it takes 42 muscles in your face to frown. It only takes 4 muscles to extend your arm and slap that mother@#?!&* upside the head. "

sorry my man for all your pain.

how you hold it with grace and

hide your shame.

save it for another day. hold your

 head high and think of those

better days. no like to live in

shame.


on Dec. 8 2009 at 1:55 pm
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

lol ur comment kinda sounds like a furtune cookie lol hehehe

on Dec. 8 2009 at 1:54 pm
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Wow great poem

with a great impact

keep up the good work

partsman25 said...
on Nov. 27 2009 at 10:52 am
very moving..i see big things happeneing in your immediate future

Toast said...
on Nov. 26 2009 at 7:46 pm
Talented young writer.




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