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We were so wrong,
That we made it right.
We slept through the day,
And only talked at night.
We never told the truth,
We only lied.
We always laughed,
When we should have cried.
We were never bland,
We had to add spice.
We were always naughty,
But rarely nice.
We used the words hate,
Instead of using love.
We fell into a ditch,
Instead of rising above.



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RedHuntingHat said...
Feb. 7, 2010 at 7:19 pm:
I don't think this is a sonnet. They have to have 10 syllables per line.
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 1:14 pm :
Thnx for ur feedback:) but honestly i'm kinda tired of everyone talking about how the poems r in the "wrong" categories....doesn't the content n flow of the poem matter more?
 
RedHuntingHat replied...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 4:43 pm :
You're right! They never specify what type of sonnet.
 
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Lixxy_93 said...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 7:02 pm:
its amazing, i would think that everyone would have a relationship like this at some point in their lives, and you managed to capture each moment perfectly. even tho i have felt the same, you did a better job then i could have ever done trying to write on this. great writing, keep it up
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 7:05 pm :
Thanx:))
lol ur a great writer too n i"m sure u could capture it as well probably better lol but thanx for ur comment:))
 
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kpf1991 said...
Nov. 11, 2009 at 10:13 pm:
Hey could you check out "anguish" or "They see through me" and rate it or just let know what you think? you have great talent and i'd really appreciate your input
 
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Jackie S. said...
Nov. 5, 2009 at 12:53 pm:
Love it sure has its ups and downs lol and you captured that well
 
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Joey36 said...
Nov. 5, 2009 at 12:36 pm:
How do you make your poems flow so well?
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Nov. 5, 2009 at 12:38 pm :
idk i really don't think about it too much i just write lol sry i wish i could help!
 
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Joey J. said...
Nov. 5, 2009 at 12:21 pm:
Haha it made me giggle
 
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Corrine J. said...
Nov. 5, 2009 at 12:02 pm:
Naughty n Nice lol love it!!! The words you used are amazing and then on top of it all you made it flow and ryme! You are AMAZING!!!! lol i'm jealous =P
 
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Alexx627 said...
Oct. 28, 2009 at 2:41 pm:
Vry Good=) Well written n quite cute
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Nov. 7, 2009 at 10:27 am :
Oh thanx:)
 
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Wilsonm said...
Oct. 21, 2009 at 4:36 pm:
This poem is extremely well written. I hope to see more from you I the future. This poem is interesting right from the start, when you said “We were so wrong” you had me attention immediately. This is also every emotional like when you said “We always laughed, when we should have cried.” So keep up your righting and make more poems soon.
 
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Brittany=) said...
Oct. 20, 2009 at 6:06 pm:
Very good. Reminds me of a relationship I still have :|
 
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heaven said...
Oct. 20, 2009 at 11:40 am:
very good indeed!!
lov it.
keep writing.
ya i just got dumped preety much
reminds me of this!!
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Nov. 7, 2009 at 10:28 am :
Thank you:) awe I'm sry u just got dumped:(
 
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thepreechyteenager said...
Oct. 19, 2009 at 8:36 pm:
cool poem, i like it
 
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Inkspired said...
Oct. 19, 2009 at 7:15 pm:
This reminds me of me and my friend who's a boy who I kind of like, but I have the feeling that it's just we're not quite mature enough yet, and that's okay (I'm 14). Anyways, this poem is really, really good, and I love it, from title to ending sentence, which, by the way, was great. Could you check out some of my work? I'd love to hear what you think!
 
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AshlanB said...
Oct. 19, 2009 at 4:22 pm:
Been there, done that. it's like you wrote about my previous relationship. Haha. Anyway, nice work! It was really good.
 
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Charliieee said...
Oct. 19, 2009 at 3:23 pm:
I had a similar relationship. You really captured the true essence. I love it. (:
 
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