Dysfunctional

October 12, 2009
By bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)


We were so wrong,
That we made it right.
We slept through the day,
And only talked at night.
We never told the truth,
We only lied.
We always laughed,
When we should have cried.
We were never bland,
We had to add spice.
We were always naughty,
But rarely nice.
We used the words hate,
Instead of using love.
We fell into a ditch,
Instead of rising above.


The author's comments:
This poem was inspired by a previous relationship... can you see why it didn't work out?!?

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svds1 BRONZE said...
on Mar. 2 2012 at 5:00 pm
svds1 BRONZE, Columbia, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind." -Dr. Suess.

LOL, yeah I can see why it didn't work out :)

 


on Feb. 3 2012 at 7:58 pm
Posiedensheartbreak SILVER, Denver, Colorado
6 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Any one can be normal it is pure talent to be weird."

I just got out of a really distructive relationship and this poem just summed it up for me

Emweeb BRONZE said...
on Feb. 3 2012 at 9:39 am
Emweeb BRONZE, Lawrenceburg, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"She got a big booty so I call her big booty."




- 2chainz

I absolutely loved it. It reminded me of one of my relationships as well. Keep writing, you're so talented.

on Jan. 12 2012 at 7:47 pm
EternallyMe03 SILVER, BIRMINGHAM, Alabama
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Great and totally relatable poem- I really like the ending and how it sums everything up, yet still leaves you wanting more. Beautiful job.

on Jan. 12 2012 at 5:58 pm
Fran333 PLATINUM, Santa Ana, Other
26 articles 17 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you're unwilling to be aware of the darkness, you cannot see the light."

very well expressed + i love the words u chose to make it rhyme

JuneTaz said...
on Dec. 22 2011 at 3:47 pm
This poem is cool because it describes the bad in a relationship, and that line "We only lied" is relatable to. Thanks for taking out the cheesiness connotated with love! 8-D

on Dec. 22 2011 at 9:43 am
ThursdayAngelus, Cherry Hill, New Jersey
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It was very well written, and i liked the way you used the repetitive beginnings for lines, it really helped drive the feeling of the peom home. Over all, it was really emotional, and i liked it alot.

on Dec. 22 2011 at 8:52 am
TaylorJade BRONZE, Atlanta, Georgia
3 articles 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
You're not alive unless you're living.

Wow. This is just like my crazily messed up and barely functional relationship. It is insane. People just don't understand the half of it when I say, 'It's complicated.' Haha. (: anyway. This is amazing! You did a FANTASTIC job with it! (: I love it!!!

on Dec. 21 2011 at 1:15 pm
mfischer SILVER, Northfield, Minnesota
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I think this can relate to alot of relationsships It is a really good poem i like it :)

on Dec. 21 2011 at 8:15 am
NightGoddess17 PLATINUM, New City, New York
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i love the honesty of this poem! it's very powerful

on Dec. 21 2011 at 12:20 am
SwagGuy101 BRONZE, Millington, Tennessee
2 articles 0 photos 9 comments
I like this a lot it reminds me of my own, could you please look at mine and give me some advice if you can.

on Nov. 29 2011 at 11:38 pm
no.name. PLATINUM, Ceres, California
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I dig this. It's a familiar feeling. 

on Nov. 29 2011 at 8:23 pm
Lola_Black GOLD, Harrison, Michigan
11 articles 2 photos 276 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I've always been famous. It's just everybody's just now finding out." --Lady Gaga

I love it! Very honest and beautiful. To tell the truth, I thought it was about a family at first.

on Nov. 29 2011 at 11:05 am
foolish_dork GOLD, Green Bay, Wisconsin
11 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
LOVE THAN HATE

this poenm is beautiful and plain out honesty and simple <3 it !!! i hope you continue writing poems

on Nov. 29 2011 at 11:04 am
foolish_dork GOLD, Green Bay, Wisconsin
11 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
LOVE THAN HATE

indeed...agree with ya as well

FULLSTOP GOLD said...
on Nov. 23 2011 at 3:48 am
FULLSTOP GOLD, Skipton, North Yorkshire, Other
13 articles 7 photos 103 comments

Favorite Quote:
forever and ever and ever and ever will never be enough

ow. i really can see why it didn't work out. but i see that because of the talent u have. please check out some of my work! thanks x

illusions GOLD said...
on Nov. 10 2011 at 2:17 pm
illusions GOLD, I Dontg Even Like This Town, Other
10 articles 0 photos 150 comments
I love this!! plz check out my work everyone!!! and comment

on Sep. 25 2011 at 8:02 pm
TaylorBreanne PLATINUM, Sandston, Virginia
24 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I write to escape reality. I write to be free. I write because I can lie or tell the truth. I write because I love it. I write because...that's the real me. I am a writer..." -TaylorBreanne

I really like this. I could really relate. I would love to know what you thought about my writing, so please check it out ! thanks !

on Sep. 24 2011 at 11:08 am
Calliashi SILVER, Litchfield Park, Arizona
6 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
The man with the key is king and honey, you should see me in a crown. ~James Moriarty

Good poem. The relationship didn't seem to work out, lol. But really this is a great piece. I'll be looking out for your other pieces as well ;)

on Sep. 2 2011 at 6:29 pm
Narene_baby SILVER, Scappoose, Oregon
7 articles 0 photos 4 comments

I really enjoyed this peice. You put the realtionship in words everyone understood but still had a good flow. If you would like you should check out some of my poems. I am somewhat new at this site and would love your feed back. :)

 





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