Take my Heart and Break It

October 11, 2009
Take my broken heart,
and rip it from my chest.
Steal away my soul,
and finally put me to rest.

I dreamt about you day and night,
and I wanted you to be mine.
You watched me in my hardest days,
and sometimes you watched me shine.

Every time I saw you,
my heart would skip a beat.
Every time you said my name,
I would spring out of my seat.

I loved you with my heart and soul.
I loved you year after year.
But something always kept us apart:
our confusion, our chances, our fear.

But now there is no hope for us,
we are doomed to be apart.
Maybe I won't feel the pain
if you completely break my heart.





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XxilybbyxX said...
Oct. 10, 2011 at 4:27 pm

Beautiful! you have a gift!! :)

 

 
musiccrazy said...
Oct. 10, 2011 at 11:06 am
really good!
 
originalpadawon25 said...
Oct. 2, 2011 at 3:36 am
whoa...that was scary good
 
theJew said...
Sept. 18, 2011 at 1:45 pm
amazing poem i really could feel the emotion in it, i dont know what else to say because im awstruck by the intensity and the emotion shown in this poem
 
dreamer_believer replied...
Sept. 30, 2011 at 3:48 pm
thank you soo much! i'm glad you enjoyed it :) sadly, sometimes some of the best writing comes from a broken heart! thanks soo much for your comment :)
 
jaylw said...
Aug. 27, 2011 at 6:28 pm
been here and it sucks!! best of luck, great job by the way
 
SunkistKisser said...
Aug. 27, 2011 at 12:26 am
Loved this! Really loved the last two lines. They stick with you and sting. Very powerful and beautiful. Great job! :)
 
DifferentTeen said...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 2:31 pm
Wow. I felt this, like I really felt it. I know what you're saying and I couldn't have written it better myself. I always write about this kind of stuff, it just helps to get it out there.
 
ErisRose said...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 2:29 pm
OMG this is so amazing! I love this poem!! the way you worded it is beautiful, and so true.
 
zone7494 said...
Jul. 14, 2011 at 7:23 pm
I really like your poem it was great. You should check out my poem called poetry speaks here's the link: TeenInk.com/poetry/sonnet/article/349142/poetry-speaks/
 
writerfreak21231This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 14, 2011 at 2:10 pm
It was an awesome Poem!!! It was sooo emotion. So touching! Great job! i just wrote two stories called nightstalker and the beast. If any of u read them please post comments if u liked them or not or if i should change anything. Thanks! :D
 
thefamoustapper said...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 10:08 pm
it sur says ur message loud and clear! i luv when people do that! 5/5!
 
Arcana_Kerr said...
Jul. 9, 2011 at 12:11 am
really.. mind blowing.. i luv this poem.. nice work.. keep it up.. :)
 
YOUNGREVELATION said...
Jul. 3, 2011 at 3:43 pm
Grand puppeteur loved the way you raised the words from the dead. SPLENDID!! PIECE!!
 
Antoinette16 said...
Jun. 30, 2011 at 1:13 pm
I Love Love Love this poem. It applies to me so well. I have feelings for my best friend but I know I can never tell him. If we were to end badly, our friendship would never be the same.
 
Snake_Tounge replied...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 2:44 pm
Sometimes Antoinette16 ....... you just have to take that risk. 
 
poeticjustice said...
Jun. 23, 2011 at 9:57 am

that was beautiful! especially the end it just got me that was awesome

 

 
shays said...
Jun. 18, 2011 at 12:38 pm
amazing! i love it!! good work! keep writing! u could inspire or influence more ppl!
 
dreamer_believer replied...
Sept. 30, 2011 at 3:49 pm
thanks so much! i hope my writing gets out there enough for people to enjoy poetry :) your comments means a lot! thanks again :)
 
missscribbles said...
May 31, 2011 at 2:39 pm
beautiful. I wish my poetry turned out this well.
 
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