You & Me

October 8, 2009
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I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.

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RealRiter This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 18, 2015 at 3:20 pm
Nice! This is such a good poem!
GGauns said...
Feb. 2, 2015 at 11:36 am
Describes exactly how I feel. Really good. Can you read mine and comment??
AustinR said...
Jan. 22, 2015 at 10:57 am
Gorgeous, simply so well written. The sadness from this experience seeps through the words. Any of use who can relate immediately fell in love with this piece. Again, an amazing piece.
nelehjr This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 17, 2015 at 12:25 am
Beautiful. So sad though...
wilds said...
Jan. 7, 2015 at 8:00 am
kennedyshine This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 5, 2015 at 2:08 am
I'm confused why this isn't in the magazine
DLove said...
Dec. 31, 2014 at 11:26 am
This is a very inspirational sonnet, not hard at all to relate to
Paakhi said...
Dec. 24, 2014 at 6:54 am
It's beautiful :) I love this poem
_xxmuxicismydrugxx_ said...
Dec. 11, 2014 at 6:30 pm
Your sonnet was very good. Im getting some inspriataion from it as well. I had the same thing happen to me. I met up with my best-friend and she wasnt the same. She walked different, talked differnt but the thing I noticed the most was her additude. She treated me like I was her butler and I didnt like it. The girl I used to know, was gone.
BlackNek0 said...
Nov. 17, 2014 at 10:42 am
I like your sonnet its verry now. Many peots have started leaving the iambic pentamete and the rules. if you searched online you would find many famous poets not fallowing poetic rules one inculding shakespear himself. Your poem had feeling that is all that matters.
cheymars227 said...
Nov. 4, 2014 at 1:56 pm
Please stop being so picky about HOW she wrote it, just notice she got her story out and that it is beautiful. We shouldn't have to follow someone else's rules just to write a nice piece. Let her be, please. From a fellow "poet" one that doesn't follow so called laws of poetry
Caramel_Shades said...
Aug. 18, 2014 at 12:48 pm
honestly i don''t care about the structure the MESSAGE is amazingly and horrifyingly true. you'vejust inspired me to write about my brother his story is similar to yhour friend's look for it soon "Brother"
Westiera said...
Jun. 19, 2014 at 6:21 pm
An elizabethan sonnet actually contains 14 lines with 3 quatrains and one couplet each line must have 10 syllables making it have an iambic pentameter
writeprincess replied...
Dec. 17, 2014 at 6:33 pm
@Westiera thanks so much, I love writing poems but don't know very many types of poems I keep the rules of poems in a notebook I use for writing prompts. This was a big help, I googled Quatrains and couplets and wrote down how many lines and 3 common rhyme schemes for the couplets and what open and closed couplets were.
Bad_at_Usernames said...
Jun. 9, 2014 at 4:20 pm
A four stanza, sixteen line poem consisting of the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef gg
HermioneHainsworth This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 23, 2014 at 6:03 am
Amazing.. thats all I can say!
kayla will said...
May 19, 2014 at 9:46 pm
A sonnet is a 14 lined poem... it's a literary device that poets use and is my favorite type of poems to write, it's almost all that I do write. I love reading them even more for even greater ideas!!
ZiviStern This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 2, 2014 at 3:02 pm
OK, as an actual answer (There are a lot of restrictions on a true sonnet so this is gonna be a little long.)
  Each line of a sonnet has five (penta) units, each of which is an unstressed syllable followed by a stressed syllable (an iamb). 
There are 14 of these lines, 3 "groups of 4" (quatrains), where the 1st & 3rd as well as the 2nd & 4th lines rhyme. Then, at the end is a rhyming couplet, which usually sums up the poem.  Make sense?
seriously said...
May 4, 2014 at 9:22 pm
Will someone please tell me what a sonnet is?
SarahXC replied...
Jan. 18, 2015 at 6:36 pm
a sonnet is a 14 line poem that rhymes :)
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