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I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.

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HermioneHainsworth This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 23, 2014 at 6:03 am
Amazing.. thats all I can say!
kayla will said...
May 19, 2014 at 9:46 pm
A sonnet is a 14 lined poem... it's a literary device that poets use and is my favorite type of poems to write, it's almost all that I do write. I love reading them even more for even greater ideas!!
ZiviStern This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 2, 2014 at 3:02 pm
OK, as an actual answer (There are a lot of restrictions on a true sonnet so this is gonna be a little long.)
  Each line of a sonnet has five (penta) units, each of which is an unstressed syllable followed by a stressed syllable (an iamb). 
There are 14 of these lines, 3 "groups of 4" (quatrains), where the 1st & 3rd as well as the 2nd & 4th lines rhyme. Then, at the end is a rhyming couplet, which usually sums up the poem.  Make sense?
seriously said...
May 4, 2014 at 9:22 pm
Will someone please tell me what a sonnet is?
SarahXC replied...
Jan. 18, 2015 at 6:36 pm
a sonnet is a 14 line poem that rhymes :)
Laugh_Live_Write said...
Mar. 30, 2014 at 9:09 pm
This is a great poem! Short, sweet, and relatable.
TheDakota said...
Feb. 27, 2014 at 8:20 pm
Try making it longer. It's good so far though :)
kayla will replied...
May 19, 2014 at 9:48 pm
It's a sonnet... and it's supose to be fourteen lines. That's what a sonnet is. :)  ...I love them!
micshea99 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 17, 2014 at 10:26 am
Great poem! Try working on keeping around the same number of syllbales in each rhyming line to give it a more constant rythem!
LittleMissFire said...
Jan. 12, 2014 at 9:43 am
Your poems very relatable. I like it a lot  
Terry_A said...
Oct. 30, 2013 at 12:28 pm
I feel like I can relate to this since I saw an old friend a few days ago. They were really different from what I remember them as. Overall, great poem!
Buurrry said...
Oct. 30, 2013 at 12:21 pm
The poem is very relatable. You convey the disapointment of seeing someone change with out you very well. I enjoyed this poem.
Annneee said...
Oct. 18, 2013 at 12:24 pm
I love this poem so much. I loved the theme of fall incorporated into this. Also, I can most definitely relate to how people change, and not for the better. Great poem overall.
Wingless said...
Oct. 17, 2013 at 8:41 pm
Really great poem! ^_^ I love it!
xG4RY said...
Oct. 17, 2013 at 7:01 pm
Why did you call this a sonnet? What type is it? It is written in Iambic Pentameter, tretrameter, monometer, ect? Did you even pick A Iamb, trochee, dactyl or anapest to start from? The rhyme scheme doesn't even really match a form of any sonnet.
Megan G. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 25, 2014 at 10:54 am
@xG4RY, I agree. It's a great poem, but I wouldn't call it a sonnet. 
DreamWeaver said...
Oct. 15, 2013 at 4:49 pm
I've been looking for a poem that described how I felt on this subject. Couldn't find a good one until this one! It's beautiful. 
Merla said...
Sept. 11, 2013 at 9:55 am
I liked this poem. It was simple and beautiful. I liked the flow, the spaces, the feeling. Good work.  
catwithglasses said...
Jul. 31, 2013 at 12:24 pm
I'm not able to relate to this, but your poem is very well written. I can picture it.
SamanthaW said...
Jul. 15, 2013 at 2:31 pm
I can really relate to this poem. I've experienced this quite a few times :/ You did a great job with it :)
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