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I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.

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Laugh_Live_Write said...
Mar. 30, 2014 at 9:09 pm
This is a great poem! Short, sweet, and relatable.
TheDakota said...
Feb. 27, 2014 at 8:20 pm
Try making it longer. It's good so far though :)
kayla will replied...
May 19, 2014 at 9:48 pm
It's a sonnet... and it's supose to be fourteen lines. That's what a sonnet is. :)  ...I love them!
micshea99This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 17, 2014 at 10:26 am
Great poem! Try working on keeping around the same number of syllbales in each rhyming line to give it a more constant rythem!
LittleMissFire said...
Jan. 12, 2014 at 9:43 am
Your poems very relatable. I like it a lot  
Terry_A said...
Oct. 30, 2013 at 12:28 pm
I feel like I can relate to this since I saw an old friend a few days ago. They were really different from what I remember them as. Overall, great poem!
Buurrry said...
Oct. 30, 2013 at 12:21 pm
The poem is very relatable. You convey the disapointment of seeing someone change with out you very well. I enjoyed this poem.
Annneee said...
Oct. 18, 2013 at 12:24 pm
I love this poem so much. I loved the theme of fall incorporated into this. Also, I can most definitely relate to how people change, and not for the better. Great poem overall.
Wingless said...
Oct. 17, 2013 at 8:41 pm
Really great poem! ^_^ I love it!
xG4RY said...
Oct. 17, 2013 at 7:01 pm
Why did you call this a sonnet? What type is it? It is written in Iambic Pentameter, tretrameter, monometer, ect? Did you even pick A Iamb, trochee, dactyl or anapest to start from? The rhyme scheme doesn't even really match a form of any sonnet.
Megan G. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 25, 2014 at 10:54 am
@xG4RY, I agree. It's a great poem, but I wouldn't call it a sonnet. 
DreamWeaver said...
Oct. 15, 2013 at 4:49 pm
I've been looking for a poem that described how I felt on this subject. Couldn't find a good one until this one! It's beautiful. 
Merla said...
Sept. 11, 2013 at 9:55 am
I liked this poem. It was simple and beautiful. I liked the flow, the spaces, the feeling. Good work.  
catwithglasses said...
Jul. 31, 2013 at 12:24 pm
I'm not able to relate to this, but your poem is very well written. I can picture it.
SamanthaW said...
Jul. 15, 2013 at 2:31 pm
I can really relate to this poem. I've experienced this quite a few times :/ You did a great job with it :)
Cassie1435 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 18, 2013 at 3:40 pm
Akshay09121 said...
Jun. 11, 2013 at 12:46 pm
awesum...!! poem
dark_armor1 said...
Jun. 8, 2013 at 10:39 pm
wow i honestly love this poem! it was simple and sweet. very good job.
anonymous said...
May 29, 2013 at 4:23 am
Just thought I'd let you know...I read your sonnet a couple of weeks ago while looking for inspiration for my own sonnet I had to write for a class assignment. I thought it was truly amazing and inspired me to write my own sonnet that wasn't boring, completely comprised of shakespearean language and make me want to pull my hair out as I wrote it. A couple of days ago we presented to the class and this guy read out the sonnet he had written, I couldn't help but think I'd ... (more »)
beccalynn1663 said...
Apr. 13, 2013 at 8:21 pm
This poem is really incredible. Anyone can relate to this and you did an amazing job:)
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