You & Me

October 8, 2009
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I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.

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Jimmy_flash said...
Dec. 27, 2009 at 2:55 am
what a great poem its really deep i can def relate really gud job!
bluemagnet22 replied...
Dec. 27, 2009 at 7:29 pm
you should submit some work:)
Rkingett This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 23, 2009 at 2:37 pm
I seriously have no idea why this poem was not published elsewhere! Oh my god! This poem touched me ever so much! I can imagine why so many people would relate to this! This poem was the best I have read all day. Kudos to you
bluemagnet22 replied...
Dec. 26, 2009 at 11:43 am
Thank you so much!
Your opinion is very encouraging:)
It always makes me feel so wonderful to know that what I write can touch someone!
Thank you again:) I'll def read n rate ur work:)
GreenIvy said...
Dec. 19, 2009 at 9:22 am
wow the feelings you used have a very strong meaning. I really enjoyed that. keep up the great work!
bluemagnet22 replied...
Dec. 26, 2009 at 11:47 am
thanx:) i try to translate my emotions into words to so my poems have true meaningful feelings and i glad you could see that:)
AmnyR said...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 9:24 pm
no problem, read mine and vote on it if you get a chance!
GazellarendraThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 10, 2009 at 2:51 pm
so simple, but yet, so powerful.
bluemagnet22 replied...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 6:52 pm
I love to hear peoples opinions thanx for commenting:))
AmnyR said...
Dec. 9, 2009 at 8:55 pm
i can totally relate, and beautifully written!
bluemagnet22 replied...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 6:51 pm
I'm so glad pple can relate to my poem
thank you for ur comment:)
Mandilee said...
Dec. 8, 2009 at 9:01 pm
Wow! I can so relate in many different situations! I love this, so simple yet such a message. And it makes you think. Wonderful! Keep writing!
bluemagnet22 replied...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 6:50 pm
Thank u so much i appreciate ur comment:))
Diana12 said...
Dec. 6, 2009 at 7:14 pm
Your writing speaks your mind! I enjoyed reading your poem its amazing and very touchful. Keep it up, better things will come to you!
bluemagnet22 replied...
Dec. 8, 2009 at 12:45 pm
Thank you so much:)
I'm glad you enjoyed it;)
And I appreciate your opinion:))
Volleygirl25 said...
Nov. 18, 2009 at 7:30 pm
Oh my i love this! i so can relate and i absolutely love it. The words flow together beautifully.
toriLou said...
Nov. 18, 2009 at 4:42 pm
This is amazing i drew me in just with the first line!! keep it up!
Joyful_angel said...
Nov. 17, 2009 at 10:43 pm
WOW~~ i love this poem and i caan totally relate!! i have a poem called "Dont Blink" i culd use feed back~
ur poem was AWESOME!!! keep writting
gabigal said...
Nov. 16, 2009 at 6:06 pm
i love resembles my the same..he's not...awesomness!!!!
bluemagnet22 replied...
Nov. 17, 2009 at 1:51 pm
Thank you!
I alway like known someone can relate to my poems! :)
I checked out some of ur poems ;) n they are rly nice:)
kpf1991 said...
Nov. 15, 2009 at 11:48 am
How this is amazing! it was a great expression of change and maturity within life's journey. Yet, you also showed the constant things in life which tied everything together! AMAZING!
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