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I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.

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Larissa S. said...
Mar. 9, 2010 at 8:01 am
when i read your poem i imediately assumed it was about an ex boy friend or old crush untill i read your quote about it and relized it was about old friends who changed ... i thought your poem was amazing and like how it can really relate to either ... great job ... keep writingg !!!!!
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 23, 2010 at 12:20 pm
Thank you so much!
That is my favorite thing about this poem is that i can relate to many different situations and I didn't even mean to do that when I first wrote it but I guess that's just the magic of poetry!
respecturself7 said...
Mar. 8, 2010 at 4:56 pm
I love this poem! You have talent!
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 23, 2010 at 12:18 pm
Thank u so much:)
I'm sure u have great talent too!
GreenLover said...
Mar. 5, 2010 at 8:23 pm
hey that was. i really felt what you were talking about. would you mind taking a look at some of my work?
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 23, 2010 at 12:17 pm
I'm glad:)
Yeppers I'll def take a look:)
Johaa said...
Mar. 5, 2010 at 4:35 pm
Really good! I loved it.
I know exactly what you mean.
this has happened to me more than once!
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 23, 2010 at 12:16 pm
Ya sadly it happens too often...
Saidah. said...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 3:12 pm
Omg, this poem is really niceee,
I really enjoyed readinqq it.
You shud check outt some of mhy pieaces,
Hopee you injoy them.??
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 23, 2010 at 12:15 pm
Thank u thank u:):)
Yes ofcoarse i"ll def check out ur stuff!
Wolfayne said...
Mar. 3, 2010 at 12:01 pm
It makes a good poem, I admit. However, It isn't exactly a true sonnet.
Sonnets have 4 stanzas, the first 3 of which have 4 lines each, and the 4th of which has only 2 lines. it goes in the abab,cdcd, efef, gg rhyme sceme. AND each line is supposed to have 10 syllables.
I'm not saying it isn't good, just that it's not exactly a sonnet.
Please look at my poetry and story! Thanx! ;D
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 2:08 pm
Thanx ya everyone keeps tellin me it's not a sonnet but there rly isn't anything i can do about it atleast u think its good lol =P
bmmskh said...
Mar. 2, 2010 at 10:34 am
i like this poem alot and i proble could never right one as good as this one so keep righting.......
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 2:07 pm
Thanx:) I'm sure u could n prolly alrdy have:)
bbg.101 said...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 3:08 pm
wow i like this alot, i can relate to every single word on this page i love this i can see this in books. good job i can defanetly rate this a 10000000000MAX
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 2:06 pm
Oh wow thank you sooo much:) that's such a compliment! I hope to see it in a book one day:)
11fresemily said...
Feb. 24, 2010 at 12:20 pm
I Love this soo much <3 its so very true.
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 2:08 pm
Thank you vry much:D
babigerl1194 said...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 7:59 pm
this is amzing i get it. it remeinds me of likin a guy and ahving a connectiion then seeing him again and nott.
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 2:06 pm
Wow I never thought of this poem that way but i guess that works too:) thanx for ur comment:))
noelleism said...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 8:09 am
This has happened to me befofe but not a break up. Never had one of those. I like your poem alot but I'm not so sure it's a sonnet , there supposed to have 14 lines you have 8. but it is a lovely poem. :)
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