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You & Me

October 8, 2009
By bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)


I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.


The author's comments:
Isn't it so sad when you see an old friend and their whole personality and outlook on life has changed...and not for the good. Well that's what inspired me for this poem...I hope you enjoyed it

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on Jan. 22 2010 at 9:31 am
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Wow thank you so much:)

I truly appreciate your comment

thank u again:)

on Jan. 22 2010 at 9:30 am
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Thank you so much:))

on Jan. 20 2010 at 11:44 pm
wow!

i love this peom...

i think that it's awesome and anyone can really relate to it!

i am really inspired by it and it's now my favorite!

nice job keep up the great writing!

its all you! :)

on Jan. 20 2010 at 6:55 pm
Ashleykimiko BRONZE, Honolulu, Hawaii
1 article 0 photos 6 comments
beautiful sonnet!! great job!!!

on Jan. 20 2010 at 5:43 pm
PunkRockLobster GOLD, Manhattan, Kansas
17 articles 4 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
Carpe diem quam minime credula postero (Seize the day, trusting as little as possible in the future)
And if not now, when?

Well thanks!!(: I hope he does.....you are a brilliant writer!

on Jan. 19 2010 at 4:37 pm
Summer500 SILVER, Ocala, Florida
9 articles 0 photos 11 comments
true that, great writing!

on Jan. 19 2010 at 8:48 am
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

I'm glad that's what I try to do with my poems:) a poems no good if it's not relatable

on Jan. 19 2010 at 8:47 am
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Awe I'm sry:(

It rly is the worst when that happens to a friendship but i hope the best for u n ur friend;) maybe he'll realize how he's changed n make it right:)

on Jan. 18 2010 at 12:03 pm
PunkRockLobster GOLD, Manhattan, Kansas
17 articles 4 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
Carpe diem quam minime credula postero (Seize the day, trusting as little as possible in the future)
And if not now, when?

I really related to this poem...I have a friend exactly like that....he used to be like a brother to me, sweet and nice and caring. But now he's some tail - chasing jerk according to everyone else.

I just hope that I won't find out the same way that all the other girls did. That they were right.....

on Jan. 17 2010 at 6:39 pm
Summer500 SILVER, Ocala, Florida
9 articles 0 photos 11 comments
exactly what im going through, you described it perfectly

on Jan. 12 2010 at 9:48 am
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

I'm really glad you can relate to the poem:) my main goal is to be able to touch people's lives through poetry so thanx for ur comment

on Jan. 12 2010 at 9:46 am
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Thank you so much:)

lol honestly i never kno how to classify my poems lol all I kno is they aren't free verse but what are they?lol

on Jan. 12 2010 at 9:45 am
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Awe I'm rly sorry about ur friend.

But I'm glad the poem touched you:)

on Jan. 12 2010 at 9:43 am
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Thanx for ur opinion

i rly appreciate hearing how pple think whether they like my poem r not

I used the word tarnished because metal tarnishes and gold is a metal n i said "when you once had a heart of gold"

But thanx for ur opinion:)

on Jan. 10 2010 at 8:32 pm
Gina Porto BRONZE, Hoffman Estates, Illinois
1 article 0 photos 2 comments
I really liked this poem because alot of people have related to losing friends that have changed in a certain way. This poem can really relate to me because I have lost many friends too by the way they have changed.

on Jan. 9 2010 at 3:41 pm
literaryaddict PLATINUM, Albuquerque, New Mexico
23 articles 3 photos 157 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We're almost there and no where near it. All that matters is that we're going." Lorelai Gilmore, Gilmore Girls
"The whole theory of modern education is radically unsound." Lady Bracknell, The Importance of Being Earnest, Oscar Wilde

this was such an awesome poem. i loved the flow and rhyme. not sure if it's a sonnet, but i think you did an amazing job regardless. please check out my work

on Jan. 9 2010 at 2:44 pm
BrittneyLynn BRONZE, W. Richland, Washington
3 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"One who saves another, has saved the entire world."

Reminded me of my friend who died last summer of a drug overdose....it was very sad that such a great person could get sucked into such aweful things.

on Jan. 9 2010 at 1:12 am
DeadlyPoppy PLATINUM, Chehalis, Washington
30 articles 13 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Is mayonnaise an instrument?" -Patrick, Spongebob Squarepants

It was a very touching poem, but some of the words didn't quite flow, in my opinion. The word tarnished, specifically jumped out at me, and it didn't seem to fit. Other than that it was really good!

on Jan. 7 2010 at 10:33 am
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

thank you so much:) ur comment was rly encouraging to me:) i love knowin i am making a difference n not just hopin it so thank u so much:) it rly touched me:)

on Jan. 7 2010 at 10:31 am
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Awe thank u sooo much:))


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