September 29, 2009
The children are running and happily screaming
Seemingly with nothing better to do
Shouting happy words with no meanings
Paying no attention to you

Tears cascade like rainwater
Down red and swollen cheeks
Hopes and dreams with them, drowning,
Down red and swollen cheeks

I'm your mind giving you someone to talk to
I'm their lies, living so you don't have to

Has no one told them someone's not breathing
Has no one told you you're not breathing

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babyfacejack said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:08 pm
it reminds me of my childhood when i was in elemantary school and im still the same height
spongebanana said...
Mar. 9, 2011 at 5:03 pm
This poem is really amazing. I used to be just like the kid in this poem and sometimes she still finds her way out. Your turn of phrase is absolutely enthralling and evocative. I don't think I could have expressed the sensation half so well as you did.
BoosflashThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 17, 2010 at 7:37 pm
i love how you start this uscker off with a setting. then you talk about how sad and depressed that loser is feeling. and i love how you repeat the 2 and 4 lines in the second stanza. that was awesome.i love the repitition in the third stanze and how you introduce yourself. i love the last stanze, how you repeated it but switched the subject pronoun thingy's. it adds emphasis captain. do your dance.
Inspiration said...
Oct. 11, 2010 at 10:46 pm
Wow it's really heavy
communicativedistractions said...
Oct. 5, 2010 at 7:38 pm
GREAT :) I like the darkness lingering in this poem
Dragonscribe said...
Sept. 29, 2010 at 6:36 pm

Nice...sad...creepy...dramatic. Excellent poem! And whoever Milo is, they made the exact same comment on three other poems.


Milo! said...
Mar. 14, 2010 at 6:23 pm
I really love this. I really like how everyone can relate to this. I hope you keep writing, because this is great. You should check out some of my stuff. I think you would like it.
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