Love Like War

October 20, 2013
By SpeakerOfTheDead PLATINUM, Lemont, Illinois
SpeakerOfTheDead PLATINUM, Lemont, Illinois
27 articles 31 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
“How vain it is to sit down to write when you have not stood up to live.”
― Henry David Thoreau


Intoxicated by the lie
A kiss in the dark
Blindly marching in

Battlefield of heats
Set it ablaze
Tonight

Equal to bullets
Every act we make
Has a sorry little consequence

Can’t even tell
If my life is a living hell
And you shooting your mouth again

Warring affection of the heart
Unaware of the very
B**** I’m running from

A love like war
All over the trigger
Don’t let the hammer drop

When you’re playing with matches
Burn it to ashes
This love like war

We go down together
Or not at all
Bang! Bang!

You should have known that
I would be willing to burn the whole world down

That’s war baby



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on Mar. 3 2014 at 3:18 pm
Shadow_Wolf GOLD, Mayfield Heigts, Ohio
10 articles 0 photos 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is not opening your eyes but opening your heart."
"You see not with your eyes, But with your heart."
"Think first with your heart not your head."
"If it has a heart, It is human."

So true.... I wish war did not exist. :(

AdzMW GOLD said...
on Nov. 1 2013 at 4:51 pm
AdzMW GOLD, Ester, Alaska
12 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Of course it is all happening inside your head, Harry, but why on earth should that mean it isn't real?" - Dumbledore

"Fail. Fail again. Fail better." - English teacher

I really enjoyed this poem A LOT. I think it is really great! Also, I like the free-ness about it, it's very true to your own heart. I think this is beautiful!

on Oct. 27 2013 at 4:34 pm
SpidersAcrossStars PLATINUM, Hayward, California
38 articles 0 photos 160 comments

Favorite Quote:
For you, a thousand times over.

3/5 Again I am a little confused as to what you are trying to say. I don't think the use a profanity was really needed. I did like the third stanza though, I thought it was great. Idk just my opinion. Maybe it just that I have never experienced this nor do I agree that love is like war....

on Oct. 25 2013 at 6:54 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 659 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

I agree with LaChouette that punctuation would help your work flow better. I think that punctuation might also help get more of the emotion you're trying to portray across to the reader. Unfortunately, this isn't the type of poem that I often read and enjoy, so I can't comment objectively on much else.

on Oct. 25 2013 at 5:42 pm
LaChouette GOLD, Mount Vernon, New York
12 articles 0 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
“And then there are the times when the wolves are silent and the moon is howling.”
- George Carlin

Very interesting comparison. I'm pretty sure I get what you're saying, but one thing I think your piece needs is punctuation; I think it'll help your work flow better. I am wondering about your second stanza though. It might just be me (usually, it is) but I'm wondering if 'and' really fits as the beginning to the last line. It might be me, but I'm wondering if 'or' would fit better there.The reason I bring it up is that I'm not quite sure of your meaning of that particular stanza. You can explain it to me; I'd like to know what you mean. Other than that, I think it is a nice piece. Your spelling and grammar is very good and I think it's very intriguing. Nice Job!


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