A Long Way Down

February 5, 2013
By Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
4 articles 0 photos 120 comments

Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.


Shes a daydreamer shes not good for much. All she does is dream of what she could become. What she doesn't realize is without doin anything now. It'll all start crumbling down.





Chorus: Its a long way down when you're high up in the clouds. Its a painful fall when you're dreamin you've got it all. Its a slowly fading memory when you open your eyes and finally see. Its a long way down.







Now shes 23 starin out the window dreamin about tomorrow. She was just a girl but now shes grown. To scared to try to achieve what she wants. So she pretends shes the movie star shes watchin now. She pretends shes the singer on the radio right now. Her life is goin by fast she hasn't realized it yet the lesson that is. (repeat chorus)







She cant stop cryin now cause shes seen the truth. But she knows shes got somethin to prove. So she'll make that dream come true. (repeat chorus)


The author's comments:
This is my very first song so please go easy on me.But please comment and put what you think.

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on Nov. 5 2013 at 11:36 pm
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.

Thank you :)

on Nov. 5 2013 at 5:26 pm
deafening-fan GOLD, Kutztown, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
“If more of us valued food and cheer and song above hoarded gold, it would be a merrier world.”
― J.R.R. Tolkien

This song was worth radio performance! Loves it and I wish I could hear it by a singer. I found you from your post.

on Oct. 14 2013 at 11:56 pm
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.

Thank you so much :)   *

on Oct. 14 2013 at 7:56 pm
Sydney33 SILVER, Columbiana, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
"Let me tell you this: if you meet a loner, no matter what they tell you, it's not because they enjoy solitude. It's because they have tried to blend into the world before, and people continue to disappoint them." -Jodi Picoult

I think this could be a really good pop song. Sing by someone like Tatlor Swift or Arianna Grande. It flows quite nicely.

on Aug. 29 2013 at 5:24 pm
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.

Thanks   *

on Aug. 29 2013 at 5:22 pm
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.

Thanks :) *

on Aug. 28 2013 at 5:42 pm
Carpe-Caffeam GOLD, No Where, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
“If it weren’t for the coffee, I’d have no identifiable personality whatsoever.” –David Letterman

I love the optimism :) It's a pretty song, and you made the sad bits a little brighter with the last line. Great job! :D

on Aug. 28 2013 at 4:26 pm
DawnieRae BRONZE, Lancaster, Ohio
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Hi molly its Dawnie! I love this song, its great, especially for your first one! great job! 

on Jun. 21 2013 at 12:37 am
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
4 articles 0 photos 120 comments

Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.

Thanks. :)

on May. 9 2013 at 10:20 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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A little dark but beautiful. I really enjoyed it. :) 

on Apr. 30 2013 at 9:15 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Hey there! For your first song I think that this is pretty impressive. I like the chorus, I could see myself singing it in the car. I think it's a quick, simple song, but you were able to put a lot of thought into it and that is very special. The flow of this is nice and it would sound great being sung. I feel that this could either be sung slow or up beat and still have the sincere meaning you put in this song. You have a few grammar errors, but those are not a big deal. In the third stanza I would suggest not using 'now' twice in a row in the fourth and fifth lines. Those are minor suggestions, so take them lightly. Great job.

on Apr. 13 2013 at 10:13 pm
IndigoElisabeth SILVER, Woodbury, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
John 1:1

Great job! All you need is a few punctuation edits, and this would be 5/5! Really good!

on Apr. 9 2013 at 3:57 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

Sure I guess

on Apr. 8 2013 at 11:02 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

This is seriously good. AND familier. I think i already commented, or tried to earlier. But thats okay, now I can come back and rate it ;)

on Apr. 8 2013 at 10:21 pm
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.

Thanks, you can sing it if you want to. If you do would you post a video so I can see how it sounds?

on Apr. 8 2013 at 10:03 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

honey, if you dont sing this, I WILL!!! awesome song, you should totally keep writing songs. i could totally think up an awesome piano part to this. awesome song!

on Apr. 8 2013 at 9:49 pm
laurengerhard SILVER, South Windsor, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"I am gone quite mad with the knowledge of accepting the overwhelming number of things I can never know, places I can never go, and people I can never be." -Sylvia Plath

Beautiful! 5 stars. I love your chorus.

on Apr. 8 2013 at 9:18 pm
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
4 articles 0 photos 120 comments

Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.

Thanks :) Stand in the Rain is 1 of my fav songs so that really means a lot. :)

on Apr. 8 2013 at 8:39 pm
jmitchbb SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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This is a really beautiful song, I can almost hear it being sung in my head!

on Apr. 6 2013 at 2:07 pm
Doctorbug BRONZE, Washington Island, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"You keep him in perfect peace whose mind is stayed on You, because he trusts in You."` Isaiah 26:3

This is absolutely beautiful. I can actually hear the music that goes with this :) But that may be because I like to sing a lot and make up my own tunes, lol XD. This actually reminds me of the song "Stand in the Rain" by Superchick.




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